Last Kiss

!KimiFemi · Mar 04, 2007, 09:39 PM

Lips meet
Oooh so sweet

While my heart breaks

Kiss me like never before
Always wanting more

Still... knowing the end awaits

Look into my eyes
And say goodbye

Truth and time stand before us

Fingers caress my cheek
No more words need you speak

Leave ... if you must

So much pain
Feels like I'm maimed

Just want you to hold me

I know you're leaving
And I wont be following

So every kiss kills me

The time is here
Our end draws near

No longer will we be

For us different paths are in store
Together again no more

So with this Last Kiss, we are set free

*RayMe* · Mar 05, 2007, 04:43 AM

First kiss b4 now last kiss...

Nice poem...but i can't really feel the poem..(not because the way u write it simply because i never get kissed b4 lol ^^) sigh~.~

!KimiFemi · Mar 05, 2007, 04:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RayMe

First kiss b4 now last kiss...

Nice poem...but i can't really feel the poem..(not because the way u write it simply because i never get kissed b4 lol ^^) sigh~.~

hey thanks =)
lol you know what?
thats not an excuss anymore RayMe lol
I'm giving you homework
go get kissed! --> lol
but I'm glad someone liked it lol

!The White Wolf · Mar 05, 2007, 04:17 PM

Well, I didn't feel it had a good flow to it. Very meaningful... but it just didn't click with me. I've read poems that you've written that I love! But this one just didn't click.

The last line however... That's a keeper right there

!KimiFemi · Mar 05, 2007, 07:19 PM

awww White your killing me
lol
well it's not really my regular style
maybe thats what threw you off =/
it was more of a project than anything else
not based on personal experience
but I did like it =)
just hope I can get more people to comment
lol =D

*RayMe* · Mar 06, 2007, 01:45 AM

go get kissed...the most daring homework ever... @.@
but i am scared...really scared if..my first kiss is the last kiss...scary...
why don't u make 1 poem abt this..

fredsboo · Mar 06, 2007, 09:51 AM

I loved it almost made me cry cause I might be going though that soon ...lol but I loved it

!KimiFemi · Mar 06, 2007, 05:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RayMe

go get kissed...the most daring homework ever... @.@
but i am scared...really scared if..my first kiss is the last kiss...scary...
why don't u make 1 poem abt this..

Haha silly!!
I think I'm done with kissing poemes for the moment
so sorry lol

Quote:

Originally Posted by fredsboo

I loved it almost made me cry cause I might be going though that soon ...lol but I loved it

Yay! some possitive feed back! =) glad to see someone of my targeted
audience found this poem =)
no offense intended to anyone else I am very grateful you all bothered to reply =) lol

Mar 04, 2007, 09:39 PM	#1 (permalink)
!KimiFemi Banned Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: So many places... I cant remember ... Posts: 483 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts	Last Kiss Lips meet Oooh so sweet While my heart breaks Kiss me like never before Always wanting more Still... knowing the end awaits Look into my eyes And say goodbye Truth and time stand before us Fingers caress my cheek No more words need you speak Leave ... if you must So much pain Feels like I'm maimed Just want you to hold me I know you're leaving And I wont be following So every kiss kills me The time is here Our end draws near No longer will we be For us different paths are in store Together again no more So with this Last Kiss, we are set free
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,814 Thanks: 77 Thanked 45 Times in 42 Posts	Re: Last Kiss First kiss b4 now last kiss... Nice poem...but i can't really feel the poem..(not because the way u write it simply because i never get kissed b4 lol ^^) sigh~.~ __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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!The White Wolf Banned Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,580 Thanks: 9 Thanked 13 Times in 11 Posts	Re: Last Kiss Well, I didn't feel it had a good flow to it. Very meaningful... but it just didn't click with me. I've read poems that you've written that I love! But this one just didn't click. The last line however... That's a keeper right there
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!KimiFemi Banned Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: So many places... I cant remember ... Posts: 483 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts	Re: Last Kiss awww White your killing me lol well it's not really my regular style maybe thats what threw you off =/ it was more of a project than anything else not based on personal experience but I did like it =) just hope I can get more people to comment lol =D
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,814 Thanks: 77 Thanked 45 Times in 42 Posts	Re: Last Kiss go get kissed...the most daring homework ever... @.@ but i am scared...really scared if..my first kiss is the last kiss...scary... why don't u make 1 poem abt this.. __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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fredsboo Newbie Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: tx newton lol Posts: 74 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Last Kiss *I loved it almost made me cry cause I might be going though that soon ...lol but I loved it* __________________ *Im the type of girl who burst out laughing in silents about something that happened yesterday*
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