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    Last Kiss

    Lips meet
    Oooh so sweet

    While my heart breaks

    Kiss me like never before
    Always wanting more

    Still... knowing the end awaits

    Look into my eyes
    And say goodbye

    Truth and time stand before us

    Fingers caress my cheek
    No more words need you speak

    Leave ... if you must

    So much pain
    Feels like I'm maimed

    Just want you to hold me

    I know you're leaving
    And I wont be following

    So every kiss kills me

    The time is here
    Our end draws near

    No longer will we be

    For us different paths are in store
    Together again no more

    So with this Last Kiss, we are set free

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    Re: Last Kiss

    First kiss b4 now last kiss...

    Nice poem...but i can't really feel the poem..(not because the way u write it simply because i never get kissed b4 lol ^^) sigh~.~

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    Re: Last Kiss

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    First kiss b4 now last kiss...

    Nice poem...but i can't really feel the poem..(not because the way u write it simply because i never get kissed b4 lol ^^) sigh~.~

    hey thanks =)
    lol you know what?
    thats not an excuss anymore RayMe lol
    I'm giving you homework
    go get kissed! --> lol
    but I'm glad someone liked it lol

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    Re: Last Kiss

    Well, I didn't feel it had a good flow to it. Very meaningful... but it just didn't click with me. I've read poems that you've written that I love! But this one just didn't click.

    The last line however... That's a keeper right there

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    Re: Last Kiss

    awww White your killing me
    lol
    well it's not really my regular style
    maybe thats what threw you off =/
    it was more of a project than anything else
    not based on personal experience
    but I did like it =)
    just hope I can get more people to comment
    lol =D

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    Re: Last Kiss

    go get kissed...the most daring homework ever... @.@
    but i am scared...really scared if..my first kiss is the last kiss...scary...
    why don't u make 1 poem abt this..

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    Re: Last Kiss

    I loved it almost made me cry cause I might be going though that soon ...lol but I loved it
    Im the type of girl who burst out laughing in silents about something that happened yesterday

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    Re: Last Kiss

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    go get kissed...the most daring homework ever... @.@
    but i am scared...really scared if..my first kiss is the last kiss...scary...
    why don't u make 1 poem abt this..

    Haha silly!!
    I think I'm done with kissing poemes for the moment
    so sorry lol


    Quote Originally Posted by fredsboo View Post
    I loved it almost made me cry cause I might be going though that soon ...lol but I loved it
    Yay! some possitive feed back! =) glad to see someone of my targeted
    audience found this poem =)
    no offense intended to anyone else I am very grateful you all bothered to reply =) lol

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