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    Last-minute

    ♥Last- Minute♥



    All alone in a park is where she is,

    Thinking about her lover's spoken words

    Rendering her almost speechless,

    Discouraging a heart to give in...



    The gentleman was once a friend

    Never thought that being would confess

    His adornment to a person like her

    A being by no means acquainted with love...



    The impoverished lass, deprived of all good:

    Shed warm tears upon hearing

    Words that created butterflies in her belly;

    Shut her hazel-brown eyes tightly.



    The gentleman perceived by looking,

    His beloved lass was not speaking

    Breaking his heart persistently

    Bended on his knees gloomily.



    The tragedy, now unfolded

    That a kind gentleman, with all the goodness

    Will never find love as strong as oak

    To an impoverished lass, without anything at all.



    The Gentleman, standing from bended knees

    Stares affectionately to his beloved's eyes,

    Tears beginning to swell up his eyes,

    Bellows his love once more.



    Disheartened by the circumstances,

    The Gentleman embraced the poor lass

    Into his gentle and assuring arms,

    Utters that he'll wait, until the day comes.



    In the arms where she rests,

    The lass slowly calms down from crying

    The Gentleman breaks his embrace,

    Stands up, wears his hat and walks away.



    The lass, opening her eyes slowly

    With her tears almost blinding;

    Sees the gentleman with difficulty

    His figure was fading softly



    The lass stunned on her spot

    Finding her lover's figure was a-fading

    For the last-minute, she shrieked

    That she awes the kind gentleman.



    The lass, weeped to her heart's content

    All the earth, heeds to her crying

    Unhappy for being such a hopeless being

    Unable to give her love a right.



    For the last-minute, the lass confessed

    Her adornment to the kind gentleman

    Though unsure if the confession is heard

    The poor lass waits until the time comes.



    author's notes: Thanks for reading, I made this poem on the last-minute. Comments and suggestions are welcomed. Thanks ^^
    Last edited by raja_psyche; Apr 13, 2009 at 06:47 PM.

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Last-minute

    I like your poem ^_6
    It was so amazing..
    Im not seeing this kind of poem more than 4 stanzas..
    and im really getiing in the poem cause its hard to confessed something that passed away...
    Im really into the poem cause that's how I got my GF.
    You know..
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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    Re: Last-minute

    ^^ nice poem, enjoyed reading it, but its kinda hard reading a 5 stanza poem, lol. but i like the message, good job ^^

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    Re: Last-minute

    Thanks receiverofhell and seraphim for commenting this poem that I created. I too, surprised myself in making a poem longer than 5 stanzas... well, I am happy that the message was conveyed ^^. I'll try to change the format the poem.

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Last-minute

    Interesting poem and I really like it because it has a good theme.Keep writing!
    I like the last stanza!

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