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    The Last Step

    I want to jump off the edge,
    And never fall to the ground.

    Create it all in my head,
    So I can scream it out loud.

    That burning desire holds me,
    To just let go of the pain.

    To cut the wound bleeding,
    And end it all, end the shame.

    When I look in the mirror,
    The emptiness stares back.

    This hollow emotion,
    Is desolate and black.

    I hear voices inside me,
    Crying for someone to hold.

    To release all the pressure,
    I need to face it, be bold.

    Now the final straw has been pulled,
    As I fall to the floor.

    I haven't really ended my life,
    Only opened a new door.

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    Re: The Last Step

    That was a very interesting poem. It had me thinking someone had commited suicide only to find out they didn't. good job.
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    Re: The Last Step

    This reminds me of some of my poetry. I know exactly where you're coming from. At first the two versed stanzas began to get on my nerves, but then I realized I used to do it as well. I think if you tried quatrains, you could get more wording and imagery into a poem.
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