last time

leftinthedark · Sep 09, 2007, 12:15 PM

I know if I think of you it will just hurt me.
But I cant let you go and I dont think ill ever be able to.
I lie to myself by saying ill be alright even thow im not.
And I never will be!I wish you would come back.
But you wont and knowing that brings me to my death!
Thats all thats left for me so with this blade to my heart!
The thoughts of you will hurt me for the last time!
by leftinthedark aka nicole!

P.R. Princess · Sep 09, 2007, 12:21 PM

it was ghood art least the way you were expressing.
There are spelling erors and I geuss the qay it qas qritten qas not the best. But it is a good poem and has lots of feeling emotions.
But yes kepp up the good work.^.^

leftinthedark · Sep 09, 2007, 12:35 PM

yea im sorry im pretty bad a spelling and stuff like it but at least i try lol

Astaroth · Sep 09, 2007, 02:21 PM

Wow!!!!
I loved the anger that you express in it......although it does have a hint of sadness also
I loved it!!!!!

*Peach_follows* · Sep 12, 2007, 09:50 AM

Oh... This hit me hard. Many times I have wished for my days to end... Just becuase I am sick of thinking, of hurting... Sick of be held prisoner by my feelings and thoughts of another.

leftinthedark · Sep 13, 2007, 01:06 PM

i know how you feel on that! thats why i write poems is because of it

Ichigo_06 · Sep 14, 2007, 06:45 PM

this is a really good poem leftinthedark I liked it alot. Keep up the good work. :2thumbsup:

*jaderabbit* · Sep 14, 2007, 10:49 PM

a slice of remorse but your seeing the end of that road and continuing up another.

In a persons life its best to move on through life when someone you love leaves you, otherwise you grow resentment of what couldve been, instead of what is!

Aweosme job on this poem, one of the best ive seen tongiht.

leftinthedark · Sep 15, 2007, 08:25 PM

thanks everyone i do enjoy your comments alot

xxoxx · Sep 15, 2007, 08:31 PM

Yes Last time ..
Nice work here with smiple words ..So this Last time you hurt me and bleed my Hurt ...
I like read it ..Well done ...Hope to see more ..

*RayMe* · Sep 16, 2007, 08:11 AM

Hmm ^^ this is good..

it's short but still got abundent of anger.. and it's kinda sad too.. ^^ nicely done ^^ good job..

Sep 09, 2007, 12:15 PM	#1 (permalink)
leftinthedark Newbie Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: ny Posts: 49 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 662	last time I know if I think of you it will just hurt me. But I cant let you go and I dont think ill ever be able to. I lie to myself by saying ill be alright even thow im not. And I never will be!I wish you would come back. But you wont and knowing that brings me to my death! Thats all thats left for me so with this blade to my heart! The thoughts of you will hurt me for the last time! by leftinthedark aka nicole! __________________ sasuke is mine.
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P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 900 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 14,170	Re: last time it was ghood art least the way you were expressing. There are spelling erors and I geuss the qay it qas qritten qas not the best. But it is a good poem and has lots of feeling emotions. But yes kepp up the good work.^.^ __________________ ~GUNSLINGER~A7X=MIA~ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~ ~I give my heart and everything to my sailor~
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leftinthedark Newbie Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: ny Posts: 49 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 662	Re: last time yea im sorry im pretty bad a spelling and stuff like it but at least i try lol __________________ sasuke is mine.
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Astaroth Chtonian Slayer Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: you really do not want to know Posts: 563 Thanks: 23 Thanked 47 Times in 45 Posts Credits: 31,449	Re: last time Wow!!!! I loved the anger that you express in it......although it does have a hint of sadness also I loved it!!!!! __________________ DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON
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leftinthedark Newbie Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: ny Posts: 49 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 662	Re: last time i know how you feel on that! thats why i write poems is because of it __________________ sasuke is mine.
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Ichigo_06 Dragonrider Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: On the back of my dragon escaping everything and ignoring the pain. Posts: 611 Thanks: 15 Thanked 10 Times in 10 Posts Credits: 4,744	Re: last time this is a really good poem leftinthedark I liked it alot. Keep up the good work. :2thumbsup: __________________ ナサンフォオツド Keep what you hold dear close for one day they may be gone forever! Make one person smile for it will continue to spread but if you make a frown that will spread as well.http://www.animeonline.net/gallery/s...0/ppuser/57173
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xxoxx Otaku Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: 無くなった Posts: 355 Thanks: 3 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 3,637	Re: last time Yes Last time .. Nice work here with smiple words ..So this Last time you hurt me and bleed my Hurt ... I like read it ..Well done ...Hope to see more .. __________________ "I'm not going there to die. I'm going to find out if I'm really alive." Spike Spiegel (Cowboy Bebop)
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