^^ Good, better, perfect, don't know which one to choose!
I lay on my bed
Face white as sheet,
Pale as bleach.
I suffer immense pain
Those from hell can only imagine
I cannot utter a single word
But I desperately needed to scream
I feel sleepy
For I have not slept in days
As I’m afraid of the dark
I often see white figures in my dreams
Calling me,
They are all waiting for me on the other side
Where everything is cold and dark
Hours, minute, second
Time don’t matter to me now
While I desperately cling on to life
The more it seems to slip away
I know that they will not come
“They” who are once my family
They do not feel any remorse
As they watch me struggle hopelessly
They stare at me with their cold eyes
Piercing into my fragile heart
I don’t understand
We were once a happy family
Time drowned my past
Forcing me to forget those precious moments
But before I go,
Before I give in,
I need you to know something
You, who once cared for me.
Life is precious
You must learn to appreciate it
Cherish every moment you have as if it’s your last
Life comes once and only once.
Now, as the sun rise
And the birds sing
I can see them ever so clearly
My time has come to move on
I take my final breath
And go…
^^ Good, better, perfect, don't know which one to choose!
Dam girl, u jus keep this gd work. *kisses u on the forehead.
Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra
Nice poem, i can't wait to see what else u got.
In the dark that no one can measure,
There's a small light which is a treasure
Waiting for you to reach and to hold
The light which is your family that you already told.....
Nice poem..... The delivery is very clear to us.....
Hmm.... pretty good. Very clear, although some depth would be a nice addition to it.
And this part......
This part kind of broke the feeling of horror and pain...... Im not sure if it matched with the poem as nice as the other parts did.I feel sleepy
For I have not slept in days
As I’m afraid of the dark
But nice poem. Lots of action, and great descriptions........ and thats a really nice contrast in the last part. Great job ^_^
yeah sadness is pretty kool, hey nice poem elieI don’t understand
We were once a happy family
Time drowned my past
Forcing me to forget those precious moments
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