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    At least a poem

    I couldn't give you my heart.
    I don't have it
    You're not bold enough to retrieve it.
    So leave it. Believe it.

    This isn't for you....
    Too sad, but true.
    I would go get it myself, if I really wanted to.
    But...
    Not for you....
    My good intentions wouldn't be true.

    You're so gentle and kind.
    And I know this must hurt.
    You must think I want someone
    to treat me like dirt.
    Or perhaps you want to see if I'd lift up my skirt.
    But, my mind is more aware when my body's alert.
    Our souls don't correspond. You don't flirt,
    ...Like -I- flirt

    I just want someone to put me under their spell.
    Where I could get lost in their eye...
    Lost in their smell.
    And we.... we would never have that story to tell.
    If its you, I attract....
    And its me you repell....

    Then maybe we're both destined to be alone.
    Both of our hearts are just accident prone.
    You can't be a tennant, If my heart is the home.
    But cheer up....
    At least I wrote you this poem...
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: At least a poem

    It sucks to have feelings like this. Especially about someone you admire/like so much. (I am guessing who your referring to. But I think it's the same person I had similar feelings about.)
    Really nicely written an felt. It was very sweet and sentimental. While being almost blunt about your feelings.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: At least a poem

    Yeah... Its less about a someone... and more about a feeling. A feeling that I have been conflicted with lately.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Question Re: At least a poem

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    I couldn't give you my heart.
    I don't have it
    You're not bold enough to retrieve it.
    So leave it. Believe it.

    This isn't for you....
    Too sad, but true.
    I would go get it myself, if I really wanted to.
    But...
    Not for you....
    My good intentions wouldn't be true.

    You're so gentle and kind.
    And I know this must hurt.
    You must think I want someone
    to treat me like dirt.
    Or perhaps you want to see if I'd lift up my skirt.
    But, my mind is more aware when my body's alert.
    Our souls don't correspond. You don't flirt,
    ...Like -I- flirt

    I just want someone to put me under their spell.
    Where I could get lost in their eyes...
    Lost in their smell.
    And we.... we would never have that story to tell.
    If its you, I attract....
    And its me you repel....

    Then maybe we're both destined to be alone.
    Both of our hearts are just accident prone.
    You can't be a tenant, If my heart is the home.
    But cheer up....
    At least I wrote you this poem...
    I'd be lying if I said this didn't make me feel a little disappointed. At the same time though, I do understand. I have had very similar feelings before.

    I know you don't want someone who "treats you like dirt." I also know that my personality and feelings aren't something that women are usually attracted to. I'm too androgynous. Maybe that's not the right word for it, but basically, I don't give off the whole "Alpha-Male" vibe, I keep my ego hidden pretty well. Knowing the kind of relationships I've had, knowing the things that I've put up with, probably doesn't help that perception of me. That's never been what I've wanted with my life (obviously) it's just how things seem to turn out.

    If you are honestly worried that I'm just interested in you for sex? Remember that I liked you at a time in your life where you've told me yourself I could have had sex with you, but I didn't. You're worth more than that. Your mind turns me on, not just your body.

    Anyways, I'm not letting myself get too disappointed about this. Like you said, it's more about a feeling than it is about me, a conflicted feeling at that. Also, I trust that you would tell me to my face if I really had no chance.

    ~z0rn

    P.S. I just hope that you'll give me the chance to find myself. Maybe you'll like the real me more. Maybe not. Either way, I'd appreciate the chance.
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    Re: At least a poem

    Quote Originally Posted by z0rn View Post
    I'd be lying if I said this didn't make me feel a little disappointed. At the same time though, I do understand. I have had very similar feelings before.

    I know you don't want someone who "treats you like dirt." I also know that my personality and feelings aren't something that women are usually attracted to. I'm too androgynous. Maybe that's not the right word for it, but basically, I don't give off the whole "Alpha-Male" vibe, I keep my ego hidden pretty well. Knowing the kind of relationships I've had, knowing the things that I've put up with, probably doesn't help that perception of me. That's never been what I've wanted with my life (obviously) it's just how things seem to turn out.

    If you are honestly worried that I'm just interested in you for sex? Remember that I liked you at a time in your life where you've told me yourself I could have had sex with you, but I didn't. You're worth more than that. Your mind turns me on, not just your body.

    Anyways, I'm not letting myself get too disappointed about this. Like you said, it's more about a feeling than it is about me, a conflicted feeling at that. Also, I trust that you would tell me to my face if I really had no chance.

    ~z0rn

    P.S. I just hope that you'll give me the chance to find myself. Maybe you'll like the real me more. Maybe not. Either way, I'd appreciate the chance.
    Dude my poem in it's etirety is quoted here..... except in your quote, my spelling errors are eliminated. You musta ran your post through a spell-check. Nice.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: At least a poem

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    Dude my poem in it's etirety is quoted here..... except in your quote, my spelling errors are eliminated. You musta ran your post through a spell-check. Nice.
    Actually, I'm a little anal about spelling and such, so I edited your poem in my post.

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    Re: At least a poem

    i really love the format
    every stanza was like ..just when you thought it was over, there was a ick at the end that made it all feel whole. and the feelings behind it were honest and true.
    great work
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