left me

When you first have left me
you never did say good-bye
I know you wanted to leave me
and yet I don't know why

Damn girl, you left me in the dark
its like something thats tearing me apart
if you want me to live, give me a little spark
and I want to say something from the heart

I always looked upon you
I remember you always smile
now your gone, I don't know what to do
my heart will last for only a little while

Is it because am a native?
Its something that I can't hide
why didn't you ever say this?
I would have shown my Indian pride

now we're no longer together
we should say something for our peace
so we could remember for this forever
and so we can go as we please

I remember we use to hold hands
and taking nice stroll walks
I know it had to be a 1 night stand
but all night we mostly talk

we said so much up all night
and we got some sleep right at dawn
we always looked at each other in the light
I know we always bond

I see you always so sad
and you have never cry
you never go so mad
but everthing will be alright

A few grammatical errors need to be tended to.

you in english? lol just kiddin man yeah i guess your right

damn nice poem. i like it. it's a little long though but nice.
I would grade it a nine :)

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Originally Posted by hellknight

When you first have left me
you never did say good-bye
I know you wanted to leave me
and yet I don't know why

Damn girl, you left me in the dark
its like something thats tearing me apart
if you want me to live, give me a little spark
and I want to say something from the heart

I always looked upon you
I remember you always smile
now your gone, I don't know what to do
my heart will last for only a little while

Is it because am a native?
Its something that I can't hide
why didn't you ever say this?
I would have shown my Indian pride

now we're no longer together
we should say something for our peace
so we could remember for this forever
and so we can go as we please

I remember we use to hold hands
and taking nice stroll walks
I know it had to be a 1 night stand
but all night we mostly talk

we said so much up all night
and we got some sleep right at dawn
we always looked at each other in the light
I know we always bond

I see you always so sad
and you have never cry
you never go so mad
but everthing will be alright

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aw............:(: :cry:...thats a nice poem...:(............

long but dont know if its good enough....................

I like it. Its cool. the poem must been good enough to catch my attention lol keep it up dude!

race never has a factor in love it never will and with how you
place this in the poem seems so sad and gives one something
to think about. i love how you poured you heart out like you felt
wronged in some way .
and the reason race isn't a factor because if you love someone
you don't see anything but the real them and that's all that matters.
very awesome poem.