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    left me

    When you first have left me
    you never did say good-bye
    I know you wanted to leave me
    and yet I don't know why

    Damn girl, you left me in the dark
    its like something thats tearing me apart
    if you want me to live, give me a little spark
    and I want to say something from the heart

    I always looked upon you
    I remember you always smile
    now your gone, I don't know what to do
    my heart will last for only a little while

    Is it because am a native?
    Its something that I can't hide
    why didn't you ever say this?
    I would have shown my Indian pride

    now we're no longer together
    we should say something for our peace
    so we could remember for this forever
    and so we can go as we please

    I remember we use to hold hands
    and taking nice stroll walks
    I know it had to be a 1 night stand
    but all night we mostly talk

    we said so much up all night
    and we got some sleep right at dawn
    we always looked at each other in the light
    I know we always bond

    I see you always so sad
    and you have never cry
    you never go so mad
    but everthing will be alright

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    Re: left me

    A few grammatical errors need to be tended to.
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    you in english? lol just kiddin man yeah i guess your right

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    damn nice poem. i like it. it's a little long though but nice.
    I would grade it a nine
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    Re: left me

    Quote Originally Posted by hellknight View Post
    When you first have left me
    you never did say good-bye
    I know you wanted to leave me
    and yet I don't know why

    Damn girl, you left me in the dark
    its like something thats tearing me apart
    if you want me to live, give me a little spark
    and I want to say something from the heart

    I always looked upon you
    I remember you always smile
    now your gone, I don't know what to do
    my heart will last for only a little while

    Is it because am a native?
    Its something that I can't hide
    why didn't you ever say this?
    I would have shown my Indian pride

    now we're no longer together
    we should say something for our peace
    so we could remember for this forever
    and so we can go as we please

    I remember we use to hold hands
    and taking nice stroll walks
    I know it had to be a 1 night stand
    but all night we mostly talk

    we said so much up all night
    and we got some sleep right at dawn
    we always looked at each other in the light
    I know we always bond

    I see you always so sad
    and you have never cry
    you never go so mad
    but everthing will be alright
    aw............ ...thats a nice poem...............


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    long but dont know if its good enough....................

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    Re: left me

    I like it. Its cool. the poem must been good enough to catch my attention lol keep it up dude!
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    Re: left me

    race never has a factor in love it never will and with how you
    place this in the poem seems so sad and gives one something
    to think about. i love how you poured you heart out like you felt
    wronged in some way .
    and the reason race isn't a factor because if you love someone
    you don't see anything but the real them and that's all that matters.
    very awesome poem.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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