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    Let Go

    I discovered the horrible truth
    All the fakes and lies beneath those smiles
    I actually believed in you
    Actually did, pouring my heart and soul out

    I dedicated a poem for you
    But all I ever got was the painful truth
    I can't take the lies and hurt anymore
    A person has their limit

    Mine has reached
    Here, take this poem as the last and LEAVE
    All I've ever wanted was friends
    But they turned out to be fakes

    And now I'm gone
    Never coming back again
    Looking back I noticed
    How foolish I was

    Dedicating everything to you
    Everything...
    What's left are dust, dirt and ashes
    Take it and go

    I won't be there when you come back
    No traces of me
    Not a hair, DNA, or shoe
    Get off me
    I have nothing left to say

    GO.

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    Re: Let Go

    Elie you are not thinking about dying right?
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    Re: Let Go

    I hope the poem doesnt have implied meaning..........

    Anyway, I loved this poem very much. It almost seems real (I surely hope not.....) The emotions were really extreme, and the words were very convincing. It was like, I just had to read as fast as I could to end the harsh words...... and the use of full caps on some of the words make it even more real, it even seemed like you were right here, shouting at someone.

    The poem really captivated me fully. Although it was only for a brief moment, I felt part of the "scene", like I was really right there witnessing the pain and hurt, and anguish, frustration, all the other feelings mixed into this poem.

    Last comment..... nice use of colour at the end. Red is a nice one to use, it was very supportive with the poem.

    Lovely poem Elie
    Kastelic's creation



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    Re: Let Go

    Hmmm..... I guess, its really hard to forget right? Hope you recover from the truth.....

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    Re: Let Go

    *dancing in a circle* Go elie GO elie. No no. I like! Your right elie. I do like it. It's very cool. Tight work man. Your best.
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    Re: Let Go

    I myself hope that this poem doesnt have some truth behind it you know I am your friend and always will be it has much anguish so much that I hope it does not bare a true meaning that you wish not to tell us about dont ever let go of the friends you have for you may lose everything that you earned


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    Re: Let Go

    i realy enjoyed the poem! so did you make it or did you just copy it from some were!
    ちょっと単一あるか。 私はあり、女の子がほしいと思う im back and seeking vengence!

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    Re: Let Go

    This poem was awsome! Keep up making them cause they are awsome!

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