Let Go

elie26 · May 03, 2006, 01:35 AM

I discovered the horrible truth
All the fakes and lies beneath those smiles
I actually believed in you
Actually did, pouring my heart and soul out

I dedicated a poem for you
But all I ever got was the painful truth
I can't take the lies and hurt anymore
A person has their limit

Mine has reached
Here, take this poem as the last and LEAVE
All I've ever wanted was friends
But they turned out to be fakes

And now I'm gone
Never coming back again
Looking back I noticed
How foolish I was

Dedicating everything to you
Everything...
What's left are dust, dirt and ashes
Take it and go

I won't be there when you come back
No traces of me
Not a hair, DNA, or shoe
Get off me
I have nothing left to say

GO.

*Rave_Grip* · May 03, 2006, 02:04 AM

Elie you are not thinking about dying right?

*bassdudez* · May 03, 2006, 03:31 AM

I hope the poem doesnt have implied meaning..........

Anyway, I loved this poem very much. It almost seems real (I surely hope not.....) The emotions were really extreme, and the words were very convincing. It was like, I just had to read as fast as I could to end the harsh words...... and the use of full caps on some of the words make it even more real, it even seemed like you were right here, shouting at someone.

The poem really captivated me fully. Although it was only for a brief moment, I felt part of the "scene", like I was really right there witnessing the pain and hurt, and anguish, frustration, all the other feelings mixed into this poem.

Last comment..... nice use of colour at the end. Red is a nice one to use, it was very supportive with the poem.

Lovely poem Elie

SousukeSagara · May 03, 2006, 03:47 AM

Hmmm..... I guess, its really hard to forget right? Hope you recover from the truth.....

*Mr. K* · May 03, 2006, 05:03 AM

*dancing in a circle* Go elie GO elie. No no. I like! Your right elie. I do like it. It's very cool. Tight work man. Your best.

*Zackraa* · May 03, 2006, 05:24 AM

I myself hope that this poem doesnt have some truth behind it you know I am your friend and always will be it has much anguish so much that I hope it does not bare a true meaning that you wish not to tell us about dont ever let go of the friends you have for you may lose everything that you earned

silvebloodalchemist · May 03, 2006, 05:34 AM

i realy enjoyed the poem! so did you make it or did you just copy it from some were!

Alucard_Spriggan · May 03, 2006, 05:36 AM

This poem was awsome! Keep up making them cause they are awsome!

*ketaro* · May 03, 2006, 08:26 AM

wow that was nice elie26, that poem reminds me of how love is.

Hold.Me.X.Thrill.Me · May 03, 2006, 08:30 AM

I like the poem, very deep!

How you made this line

Quote:

What's left are dust, dirt and ashes

As a group of three, made it more effective. And the endibg word, GO! Tied the poem altoghether in my opinion!

pigtaru · May 03, 2006, 10:33 AM

The poem reminded me of a previous relationship that I had. Oh so sad, so sad.

Good poem. Keep them coming.

May 03, 2006, 01:35 AM	#1 (permalink)
elie26 Elie Jelly Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Hell is an understatement Posts: 608 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 2,051	Let Go I discovered the horrible truth All the fakes and lies beneath those smiles I actually believed in you Actually did, pouring my heart and soul out I dedicated a poem for you But all I ever got was the painful truth I can't take the lies and hurt anymore A person has their limit Mine has reached Here, take this poem as the last and LEAVE All I've ever wanted was friends But they turned out to be fakes And now I'm gone Never coming back again Looking back I noticed How foolish I was Dedicating everything to you Everything... What's left are dust, dirt and ashes Take it and go I won't be there when you come back No traces of me Not a hair, DNA, or shoe Get off me I have nothing left to say GO. __________________
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May 03, 2006, 02:04 AM	#2 (permalink)
Rave_Grip I hate idiots on AO. Kill Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Life is an illusion. Posts: 2,314 Thanks: 0 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 14,832	Re: Let Go Elie you are not thinking about dying right? __________________ Wherever you see, there is always 98% of people who love something; and 2% that don't. I'm pretty sure that not ALL 98% of peeps don't support Lolita or anything. So if you agree, put it in your sig. \| .:~My AO Gallery~:. \| \| .:~The AO Rules~:. \| Last edited by Rave_Grip; May 03, 2006 at 02:15 AM.
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bassdudez AO shady bystander Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Wherever Kirika goes.... Posts: 895 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 502	Re: Let Go I hope the poem doesnt have implied meaning.......... Anyway, I loved this poem very much. It almost seems real (I surely hope not.....) The emotions were really extreme, and the words were very convincing. It was like, I just had to read as fast as I could to end the harsh words...... and the use of full caps on some of the words make it even more real, it even seemed like you were right here, shouting at someone. The poem really captivated me fully. Although it was only for a brief moment, I felt part of the "scene", like I was really right there witnessing the pain and hurt, and anguish, frustration, all the other feelings mixed into this poem. Last comment..... nice use of colour at the end. Red is a nice one to use, it was very supportive with the poem. Lovely poem Elie __________________ Kastelic's creation <<::\|\|.Bass's AO fanart.\|\|\|..AO Leaders..\|\|\|.Must-read rules of AO.\|\|::>>
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SousukeSagara Mercenary Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: War zones around the globe... Posts: 528 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 901	Re: Let Go Hmmm..... I guess, its really hard to forget right? Hope you recover from the truth..... __________________
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Mr. K THUMBSUCKING ADDICTION Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Alaska Posts: 1,266 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 3,213	Re: Let Go dancing in a circle Go elie GO elie. No no. I like! Your right elie. I do like it. It's very cool. Tight work man. Your best. __________________ ≥°≤ [?] █▓▒░░▒▓█ [?] ≥°≤ ◕ ◡ ◕;;;;[?]
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May 03, 2006, 05:24 AM	#6 (permalink)
Zackraa †Everyone Here Hates Me† Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: I have no idea Posts: 1,342 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 835	Re: Let Go I myself hope that this poem doesnt have some truth behind it you know I am your friend and always will be it has much anguish so much that I hope it does not bare a true meaning that you wish not to tell us about dont ever let go of the friends you have for you may lose everything that you earned __________________ †MyDeviant† †Myspace† †ZAnime† †My Shack† †My Gaia†
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May 03, 2006, 05:34 AM	#7 (permalink)
silvebloodalchemist Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Look behind you Posts: 137 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 260	Re: Let Go i realy enjoyed the poem! so did you make it or did you just copy it from some were! __________________ ちょっと単一あるか。私はあり、女の子がほしいと思う im back and seeking vengence!
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Alucard_Spriggan Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Florida Posts: 257 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 1,029	Re: Let Go This poem was awsome! Keep up making them cause they are awsome! __________________ Hey if u have xbox live add me or msg me on my Xbox 360 tag Sin Spriggan. *Thank you Ryomakurosaki for the wicked sig!!*
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May 03, 2006, 08:26 AM	#9 (permalink)
ketaro kitty Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 4,221 Thanks: 27 Thanked 31 Times in 29 Posts Credits: 23,200	Re: Let Go wow that was nice elie26, that poem reminds me of how love is.
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May 03, 2006, 10:33 AM	#11 (permalink)
pigtaru Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Elk Grove, CA USA Posts: 397 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 171	Re: Let Go The poem reminded me of a previous relationship that I had. Oh so sad, so sad. Good poem. Keep them coming. __________________ o~Piggy-san~o
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