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    Let me be.

    I feel dead.
    And I feel numb.
    While they all start,
    To look so very dumb.

    They can try as hard,
    As they want. Try
    As hard as they might.
    I already want to die.

    So their tourture and
    Stupid immature torment,
    Is really effing stupid!
    They lose the sentiment.

    Forget them all.
    THey are no good.
    They should just stay stuck,
    In their lame ass hood.

    I don't need them,
    They don't need me,
    So they should just all,
    Let me be.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Let me be.

    A very different poem from the ones I've read so far. Not bad. =3

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    Re: Let me be.

    Yeah I suppose it is different then most of my work. I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the comment.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Let me be.

    The breaks made it read a little wierd. But it was ok. For some odd reason, I find I like your work better when rhyming is sparse, unintentional, or not there at all. I guess This poem seemed to have forced rhyming... and it kinda took from the raw emotion I'm used to seeing from you.

    Ha. Even though I could totaly feel the "f*ck you" vibe (Oh ,and trust I was vibing right along with it. Seems so many people need to hear a good F*CK YOU! these days)... I had to giggle a bit when you used the word "effing". That is soooo valley girl!
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    I know. It made me giggle too actually. I like the less rhyming ones myself. But it wasn't forced, just an actual effort. Thanks much for the comments.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Let me be.

    Good poem. There's a good amount of words to describe your emotion. Y'know, no matter what, they're still your family and I'm sure that they love you. You guys are just having difficulties finding common ground. And if it makes ya feel better, my dad and I are on and off like a light switch. I always find myself getting along with him, even when I've told people I'm not speaking to him any more. You'll be fine, just give it some time.


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    Re: Let me be.

    @.@ wow.. nicely done.. love the rhymes the flow is good like always.. ^^ love it keep up the good work ^^

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    rayme: Thanks so much! I love your comments every time I get them. I appriciate you taking the time to read and comment my work. <3

    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Good poem. There's a good amount of words to describe your emotion. Y'know, no matter what, they're still your family and I'm sure that they love you. You guys are just having difficulties finding common ground. And if it makes ya feel better, my dad and I are on and off like a light switch. I always find myself getting along with him, even when I've told people I'm not speaking to him any more. You'll be fine, just give it some time.
    Thanks. I appriciate your comments a lot. As always. And yes, they will always be family. Although at this point, I don't give a damn if they love me, they don't know how to act right and I'm disgusted and disapointed and hurt by EVERYONE over there. I can get along with anyone. I can be friendly towards anyone Especially family. I'm not not speaking to anyone. I'm not avoiding anyone. But I'm not cool with that shit. I'm not cool with that house. I'm not cool with the way shit got handled. I'm not cool with any of it. But I'm not going to be rude. Just not going to be around. I'm not talking to them. I have nothing to say at all. AT ALL to any of them. Until I hear an apology from someone. I had apologized already fro what I did when the whole shit started. And then they did their part. AFTER that. so. Whatever. I'm done with those people. It's been made CRYSTAL clear how important I am to my father. It's been made CRYSTAL clear that my brother needs some help and not just a little, he's psychotic. And It's been made CLEARER that Lori is snowballed by her sons shit-storm. Because she doesn't think theres much wrong with him.
    Last edited by bratling; Oct 29, 2007 at 07:58 AM. Reason: forgot something

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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