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    Letting go for you!

    In time you will see I'm right
    all the times when you thought
    things would just go away , i wish
    you were right.

    All the pain that's inside just
    builds and then it breaks like a
    dam that has to much water ,it drowns
    everything inside to where i am filled
    with pain.

    When i hold you and sigh out
    to your cheek , my thought are
    of a place where things are so
    simple , you ask me whats wrong
    and i lie.

    As i lay here in bed looking over to you
    seeing how sound you sleep i think of how
    things just want ever be the way you want,
    but that's OK because I'm letting go now of the
    pain by letting you go.

    I am on the outside looking in all i see is pain now
    and it want ever go away as long as i am with you,
    all this time i feel like this wont end was for you ,all
    this time i have tried and my intentions full of pride
    but look at how it ended the pain is just to much.


    Good bye forever to the pain as i leave you now
    to get rid of this pain that was so easily gained
    with how i am , maybe in another life we can be together
    and pain want be there.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Letting go for you!

    ^^ i really liked your poem. it kinda reminded me of my current situation. keep up the good work! i would love to read more

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    Re: Letting go for you!

    Very good poem it had alot true emotions and is truthful of how most relationships that you think is going so well usually end up which I think is a shame. You write such great poems.
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    Re: Letting go for you!

    holder.. @.@ sheesh such a nice poem with vivid feeling to it.. :/ my my... good job.. man... @.@ keep up the good work man...

    and i agree with cherry.. ^^

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    Re: Letting go for you!

    Awww... come on!!!! Nothing good comes without pain!!!! I must admit I don't really understand why there's that urgo to leave unless it's that you (with you I mean lyrical "me", witch could really be you ofcourse) feel that that love is just not enough, that it's not real eough to stay together... then I do understand...

    This is really good- all the desriptions, the way you feel... the way you think she feels...
    I espeially like the places where you talk about her thinking that everything is alright, sleeping sound and so... As well as I love the 3rd stranza, because it seems just so real... nice work, as always ^^

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