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    Letting me be free.

    Sometimes it's a suprise to see,
    How someone you've never met,
    Could be the only one to ever,
    Really get, all the pieces to your
    Puzzle.

    Someone never seen face to face,
    Sees a bigger picture, better then,
    Even family and friends from years
    ago, and recently. And still their,
    wish, is you.

    Distancing and no communication,
    The pain too much to bare knowing,
    He'll never be allowed to be there.
    Guilt on my shoulders because I knew,
    It wouldn't ever work.

    But my heart and mind connect to you,
    Even after all the s**t we've beent hrough.
    I'll never forget your piece of understanding,
    Your harsh brand of advice, and disapointment
    Shining through.

    And will forever love you, for letting me be free.
    Last edited by bratling; Dec 06, 2007 at 09:25 AM.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Letting me be free.

    Sometimes, it's the one's that we never "see" that are the one's we cherish most. I have two that I have as well. This poem is one I can fully understand myself. Nice work there, and keep them coming.

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    Re: Letting me be free.

    I totally commented this and thought you were responding to the wrong poem. STupid bratling. But yeah... Most people don't understand the internet relationships or even the other types of long distance relationships being able to mean something. But I am more capible of being open, writing is my element of getting my point across. I can't verbalize properly. An thusly this man probably had a more realistic understanding of the dark ugly parts, as well as the good parts of me. Thank you very much for the comment. <3

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    Re: Letting me be free.

    This was very nice! I like how it kinda just flows on it's own. It's an interesting piece. I wonder who it's for. ^_^ At any rate, good job hon!


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    Re: Letting me be free.

    Thanks. I am glad you liked this so much. I enjoyed writing it because I've never...addressed the relationship poetically before. Never written about ol' boy. It's the wigger by the way.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Letting me be free.

    Nice one there Brat, hum I detect some bit of ryhiming? anyways yes I agree with sprout, you probably didnt mean for it to flow so well but it just did that on its own. Nice job again however could we use different words other then cussing, like crap istead of shit, dont know who will be reading you know could be a little kid for all we know.
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    Re: Letting me be free.

    Didn't realize I'd sworn to be honest. I am an adult, I swear, a lot in fact. Dirty habit by the way. But anyways, I find it hard to forget that sometimes.

    I didn't really notice the rhyming in this one to be honest. I was worried it wouldn't flow right just because of the way I wrote it. It's not a feeling/relationship/person I've ever allowed myself to address in this type of outlet, even though he really is the reason I write... And one of my biggest secret fans. And my own therepist when he can bare it.

    Thanks for the comment.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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