Life

sasukesgirl · Oct 13, 2007, 06:48 PM

life is full of love and hope
in some cases dispair and doubt
emotion that cant not be avoided
cries that will not be understood
smiles and joy in the faces of all
excet the one of your own
friends and family can not help
only you can help yourself
passion and yern for love
clinging to your friends not wanting them
to leave and depart
letting go of old memories
making mistakes
making new friends
trying to hold on to the good of life
whats left for you when all is lost...?

blackrose92 · Oct 13, 2007, 06:56 PM

your poem is really good^^ i especially liked "trying to hold on to the good of life
whats left for you when all is lost...?" keep up the good work =]

*RayMe* · Oct 14, 2007, 05:15 AM

I agree with Blackrose there... nicely done... ^^ but theres a few spelling mistakes in there

and grammatical errors.. hmm... but overall the poem is very good ^^

Oct 13, 2007, 06:48 PM	#1 (permalink)
sasukesgirl Otaku Join Date: Sep 2007 Posts: 105 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 3,206	Life life is full of love and hope in some cases dispair and doubt emotion that cant not be avoided cries that will not be understood smiles and joy in the faces of all excet the one of your own friends and family can not help only you can help yourself passion and yern for love clinging to your friends not wanting them to leave and depart letting go of old memories making mistakes making new friends trying to hold on to the good of life whats left for you when all is lost...? __________________
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blackrose92 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: washington state Posts: 149 Thanks: 7 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 2,248	Re: Life your poem is really good^^ i especially liked "trying to hold on to the good of life whats left for you when all is lost...?" keep up the good work =] __________________ thank you so much zyta!!!^^ www.myspace.com/tallchocolatebeauty
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: Life I agree with Blackrose there... nicely done... ^^ but theres a few spelling mistakes in there and grammatical errors.. hmm... but overall the poem is very good ^^ __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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