Life Is About Loving You

The pencil filled with words
The paper filled with thoughts
The book filled with ideas

Thoughts that have been converted into ideas
Thoughts concerning someone
Turned into
Ideas trying to protect someone

Ideas that have built a world
A world just for two

A world that could be changed
By a touch
Or even a smile

I like to think every moment about someone
Since i open my eyes
I wish to do so
Untill i eyes close

I think of keeping that smile
I think of keeping that feeling
On one person's beautiful face

I'm surely loving the sunrise
And i'm surely loving the sunset
Becuase their true beauty reminds of her beauty

The way she spells her words
The way she builds her smile
And especially the way she creates her feelings
I believe thats the way she makes me see her true beauty
A beauty thats built on
Kindness and sweetness
That very beauty
That makes me forget
All my lonelyness and sadness

A person that is called an angel
A person that came down from the heavens
And that person
Is you

The thoughts of you
The dreams about you
And the feelings of you

Are making me open my eyes wider deeper
Making me see whats around me
Making me feel safe from everything that may surround me

You are the only person i ever thinked about so much
You are the only person i wanted to protect from harm

You are the one who reminds me of the moon
And the who makes me believe in angels

I can't imagen how it feels
To live a second without you
I can't imagen how can i move on
If you weren't there next to me

I can only live with you
I can only breathe next to you
I can only feel holding you

I live just to
Keep your smile
I live just to
Keep you happy

My life is about
Loving you

very good poem... reminds me of "Puppy-dog love." Which many teens experience through school.. reminded me of how I felt with a few girlfriends in high-school.. but anyway.. to the technical problems I've spotted.

Imagen is mispelled.. should be imagine..

"You are the only person i ever thinked about so much"

The word "Thinked" doesn't exist.. should be "Thought"

and then the usual un-used commas where the rythm breaks, for instance...

"With eyes so blind, tears caress the cheek. (random ryming"
With thoughts so kind, fears hit their peak."

Overall.. tis a good poem.. and like I've said before, punctation is but a small factor of poetry in my book, though it doesn't hurt to exercise perfection :P

OMG I LOVE IT!!! *tear* Keep it up!!!

i'm sorry, but i can't focus my eyes on it. the letter run together, can you make the font slightly bigger?

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Originally Posted by fayt lingod

i'm sorry, but i can't focus my eyes on it. the letter run together, can you make the font slightly bigger?

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thats bull u just like to read dark poems.:lurk:
and if not get some lents

i'm serious, my eyes don't focus very well, i ussually wear my mom's glasses she uses for computer reading. but she's not here, she has them at her office.

Nice love poem amigo i like it a lot.:thumb:

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Originally Posted by fayt lingod

i'm serious, my eyes don't focus very well, i ussually wear my mom's glasses she uses for computer reading. but she's not here, she has them at her office.

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when u use ur momns glasses do u see well or blurry.