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  1. Aug 20, 2006 07:10 AM #1
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    Life Is About Loving You

    The pencil filled with words
    The paper filled with thoughts
    The book filled with ideas

    Thoughts that have been converted into ideas
    Thoughts concerning someone
    Turned into
    Ideas trying to protect someone

    Ideas that have built a world
    A world just for two

    A world that could be changed
    By a touch
    Or even a smile

    I like to think every moment about someone
    Since i open my eyes
    I wish to do so
    Untill i eyes close

    I think of keeping that smile
    I think of keeping that feeling
    On one person's beautiful face

    I'm surely loving the sunrise
    And i'm surely loving the sunset
    Becuase their true beauty reminds of her beauty

    The way she spells her words
    The way she builds her smile
    And especially the way she creates her feelings
    I believe thats the way she makes me see her true beauty
    A beauty thats built on
    Kindness and sweetness
    That very beauty
    That makes me forget
    All my lonelyness and sadness

    A person that is called an angel
    A person that came down from the heavens
    And that person
    Is you

    The thoughts of you
    The dreams about you
    And the feelings of you

    Are making me open my eyes wider deeper
    Making me see whats around me
    Making me feel safe from everything that may surround me

    You are the only person i ever thinked about so much
    You are the only person i wanted to protect from harm

    You are the one who reminds me of the moon
    And the who makes me believe in angels

    I can't imagen how it feels
    To live a second without you
    I can't imagen how can i move on
    If you weren't there next to me

    I can only live with you
    I can only breathe next to you
    I can only feel holding you

    I live just to
    Keep your smile
    I live just to
    Keep you happy

    My life is about
    Loving you
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  2. Aug 20, 2006 07:19 AM #2
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    Re: Life Is About Loving You

    very good poem... reminds me of "Puppy-dog love." Which many teens experience through school.. reminded me of how I felt with a few girlfriends in high-school.. but anyway.. to the technical problems I've spotted.

    Imagen is mispelled.. should be imagine..

    "You are the only person i ever thinked about so much"

    The word "Thinked" doesn't exist.. should be "Thought"

    and then the usual un-used commas where the rythm breaks, for instance...

    "With eyes so blind, tears caress the cheek. (random ryming"
    With thoughts so kind, fears hit their peak."

    Overall.. tis a good poem.. and like I've said before, punctation is but a small factor of poetry in my book, though it doesn't hurt to exercise perfection :P
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  3. Aug 20, 2006 10:29 AM #3
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    Re: Life Is About Loving You

    OMG I LOVE IT!!! *tear* Keep it up!!!
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  4. Aug 20, 2006 10:31 AM #4
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    Re: Life Is About Loving You

    i'm sorry, but i can't focus my eyes on it. the letter run together, can you make the font slightly bigger?

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    Re: Life Is About Loving You

    Quote Originally Posted by fayt lingod View Post
    i'm sorry, but i can't focus my eyes on it. the letter run together, can you make the font slightly bigger?
    thats bull u just like to read dark poems.
    and if not get some lents



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  6. Aug 20, 2006 10:36 AM #6
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    Re: Life Is About Loving You

    i'm serious, my eyes don't focus very well, i ussually wear my mom's glasses she uses for computer reading. but she's not here, she has them at her office.

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    Re: Life Is About Loving You

    Nice love poem amigo i like it a lot.



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    Re: Life Is About Loving You

    Quote Originally Posted by fayt lingod View Post
    i'm serious, my eyes don't focus very well, i ussually wear my mom's glasses she uses for computer reading. but she's not here, she has them at her office.
    when u use ur momns glasses do u see well or blurry.



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