what a lovely poem,to me there's nothing you should change just leave it ^_^
Life of a Candle
In the vast darkness of night,
As the cold wind sings a lullaby
The shining stars are none in the tranquil sky,
Lingering solitude is at sight.
In a small shanty across the woods,
Is where a white lighted candle belong,
Producing a little light and temporary warmth
To a father, a mother and a son.
Time is fleeting, the candle starts melting
Little by little the white candle’s light weakening.
The father held his wife and his son,
As the cold night wind blows fiercely.
The candle in the distant starts to weep
Hopeless to give light in the entire night
All it wanted is to keep the family warm,
And to shine some light for the infinite darkness.
>thanks for reading. You may comment on this poem, if you have critiques just let me know.
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what a lovely poem,to me there's nothing you should change just leave it ^_^
very awesome poem and cruel just
like in life sure thigs llok hopless and
just when you think all is lost and the night
will come to a dramatic end....it dosnt the night still
falls and the harsh reality wins once more.
its very cool how you portray this Raja
and its very true to life ,there isnt always
a happy ending even when there should be
the odds are always against you ,even when things look
like they cant get any worse they still do.
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
Isolate and save you from yourself
@ chris:I am happy to seeyour comment Chris. Thanks. Yeah, there are times when life seemed so unfair and unjust.
@Nightmaregirl: wow thanks for your comment, i do appreciate.
Last edited by raja_psyche; Jan 31, 2007 at 03:33 AM.
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