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    Life Dreams

    Dreams can be like fantasies
    Parts of your wildest desires
    To get the prized money,
    Or to get the car you always wanted.
    Possibly the girl or boy of your dreams.

    I kept having such dreams
    Never ending like my mind was some falls
    Kept poring out, never stopping.
    When it gets the the greatest part,
    A sudden dam closes the fall
    And halts the flow of the dream
    And I always want to go back
    To where ever it was, to relive it again
    Just one more time

    I have this specific dream
    And I'll never forget it
    I've met this special girl
    Wonderful as can be
    We've spent much time together
    And like I've got the whole world by my side

    So when we lay there
    Under the stars, a sudden shock happened
    Is this a dream? But, a kiss made me realize
    No, this can't be just a dream
    But The dream, happening in real life.

    Writer's Notes: Blah...Writer's block for about month sucks. And also being busy sucks too. I just wanted to write something, just something. And this kinda came into mind. I know it's not too good. But, criticism is highly recommended.

    They say, "I will die for my country." I never hear them say, "I will kill for my country."

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    Re: Life Dreams

    Very nice... very nice, I like it. Good work for something you just threw down for the heck of it. Yes, very nice.

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    Re: Life Dreams

    agreed with umbriel.. very nice indeed... ^^

    "I have this specific dream
    And I'll never forget it
    I've met this special girl
    Wonderful as can be
    We've spent much time together
    And like I've got the whole world by my side"

    hmm... this part...is kinda sweet... but the wording to it dont make it sounds any sweeter... ...try use more hmm..how to say it...sweeter ways of saying things..

    this is good... ^^ keep it up..and i'll be keeping an eye for you..

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