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    Life, Growth, Death..... OR .....The Stages of a Rose

    I cannot deny myself.
    I am a rose.
    and roses do three things.

    They live.
    They grow.
    They soon die.

    I've always feared the third.
    Always wanted to live and grow,
    and not die.

    Here's my problem...
    I can't live,
    unless something before me dies.

    Thus...
    Something in me must die,
    in order for the rest to live and grow.

    It is the blessing,
    and the curse,
    of the life of a rose.

    beauty lives...
    beauty grows...
    the rest dies....

    and thus with one death,
    comes the life of another,
    more beautiful rose.

    if only the dead of me,
    were to be resurrected,
    more beautifuly.......


    White Rose


    (I'm sorry if this one is not up to par. I can't stop thinking tonight, and thus... cannot stop writing. I'll end my poems here tonight though. Happy Thanksgiving to all of you.)

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Re: Life, Growth, Death..... OR .....The Stages of a Rose

    this is a very beautiful poem^^ it had nice flow and your words were connected throughout..all though i was quite confused when u said,

    "Here's my problem...
    I can't live,
    unless something before me dies.

    Thus...
    Something in me must die,
    in order for the rest to live and grow.

    It is the blessing,
    and the curse,
    of the life of a rose."

    is there something in your life that makes you feel this way?.....
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    Re: Life, Growth, Death..... OR .....The Stages of a Rose

    Not a bad poem.
    Improvements: Watch out for spelling errors and add more details.
    Overall, it's a nice poem.
    Keep up the good work.

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    Re: Life, Growth, Death..... OR .....The Stages of a Rose

    The basis of the confusion is simple. Think of it this way. A rose needs pruning... and thus... when you cut away the parts that are dying, the rest of the rose grows much better. It was what i was thinking at the moment.

    as for errors... they are a part of my poetry. It comes with the read. I'm not perfect, neither should my poetry be.

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Re: Life, Growth, Death..... OR .....The Stages of a Rose

    I absolutely loved it, Shade.

    It sounds like me. I mean, it sounds like something I would write. I honestly enjoyed reading the poem. I wanted to continue reading, as opposed to many of the poems here that while I read I wish I'd never started. It had a great flow, and the message.. How one cannot live on unless something significant happens.. unless something blooms from within..

    Great, tiger

    10/10 !

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