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    Life is hurting me!!

    Hey what's up? How do you all do?. It has been a while since i have posted a poem. Hence, i decided to post this one poem that i wrote today, i hope you all like it.
    You were my everything
    Only you could give me anything
    Unforunately since i lost you i have lost hope and serenity

    Although, i still remember your beautiful smile
    Reading our love letters i have been doing for a while
    Embossed i keep them in my love memories pc files

    Evidently i can't forget our time together
    My heart can't live with this pain forever
    Only you were and will be the one that i loved ever

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    Re: Life is hurting me!!

    I really enjoyed reading this poem. ^_^

    Strangely enough it had a very traditional romance feel to it. Probably because of the rhymes. ^^;;

    I'd have to say this was my favourite line:
    Unforunately since i lost you i have lost hope and serenity

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    Re: Life is hurting me!!

    wow.. awesome one there! really nice and straight to the point.
    don't forget to put commas and period.
    this will help the reader to breath? hehehe..

    but its cool! i love it!

    If you don't like me, it's mind over matter.
    I don't mind and you don't matter

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    Re: Life is hurting me!!

    I liked it but maybe capitalize some of your words.
    Though your poem touched my heart. It was sad
    and calming at the same time. Keep up the good
    work.
    ™Mommy To Micah And Shawn!™


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    Re: Life is hurting me!!

    Aww, nice to hear this from you bud. It's really entertaining, maybe you found someone better?

    Jk ^_^
    Only capitalization of some words.

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    Re: Life is hurting me!!

    Why aren't there more happier poems??

    'Cause you give me something / That makes me scared, alright / This could be nothing / But I'm willing to give it a try / Please give me something
    'Cause someday I might call you from my heart

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    Re: Life is hurting me!!

    Quote Originally Posted by Pyoro-Pyoro View Post
    Why aren't there more happier poems??
    Dude you should write some poems and then post them.

    Thank you all for your responses. I didn't use comas and periods in this particular poem because i wanted to try something different like for instance; free verse. Thanks again.

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    Re: Life is hurting me!!

    Quote Originally Posted by ketaro View Post
    Dude you should write some poems and then post them.

    Thank you all for your responses. I didn't use comas and periods in this particular poem because i wanted to try something different like for instance; free verse. Thanks again.
    Me? Nah, never much of an artistic kind of person. That's why you don't see me with poems or sigs/walls. Maybe if there's some type of tutorial on writing poems i'll try.

    Maybe I can copy and paste the lyrics from a happy song??
    Last edited by Legend; May 03, 2007 at 03:51 AM.

    'Cause you give me something / That makes me scared, alright / This could be nothing / But I'm willing to give it a try / Please give me something
    'Cause someday I might call you from my heart

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