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Reply With QuoteI really enjoyed reading this poem. ^_^
Strangely enough it had a very traditional romance feel to it. Probably because of the rhymes. ^^;;
I'd have to say this was my favourite line:
Unforunately since i lost you i have lost hope and serenity
Hey what's up? How do you all do?. It has been a while since i have posted a poem. Hence, i decided to post this one poem that i wrote today, i hope you all like it.
You were my everything
Only you could give me anything
Unforunately since i lost you i have lost hope and serenity
Although, i still remember your beautiful smile
Reading our love letters i have been doing for a while
Embossed i keep them in my love memories pc files
Evidently i can't forget our time together
My heart can't live with this pain forever
Only you were and will be the one that i loved ever
I really enjoyed reading this poem. ^_^
Strangely enough it had a very traditional romance feel to it. Probably because of the rhymes. ^^;;
I'd have to say this was my favourite line:
Unforunately since i lost you i have lost hope and serenity
wow.. awesome one there! really nice and straight to the point.
don't forget to put commas and period.
this will help the reader to breath? hehehe..
but its cool! i love it!
If you don't like me, it's mind over matter.
I don't mind and you don't matter
I liked it but maybe capitalize some of your words.
Though your poem touched my heart. It was sad
and calming at the same time. Keep up the good
work.
™Mommy To Micah And Shawn!™
Thanks For The Amazing Tag Pyro!
Aww, nice to hear this from you bud. It's really entertaining, maybe you found someone better?
Jk ^_^
Only capitalization of some words.
Why aren't there more happier poems??
'Cause you give me something / That makes me scared, alright / This could be nothing / But I'm willing to give it a try / Please give me something
'Cause someday I might call you from my heart
Dude you should write some poems and then post them.Originally Posted by Pyoro-Pyoro
Why aren't there more happier poems??
Thank you all for your responses. I didn't use comas and periods in this particular poem because i wanted to try something different like for instance; free verse. Thanks again.
Me? Nah, never much of an artistic kind of person. That's why you don't see me with poems or sigs/walls. Maybe if there's some type of tutorial on writing poems i'll try.
Maybe I can copy and paste the lyrics from a happy song??
Last edited by Legend; May 03, 2007 at 03:51 AM.
'Cause you give me something / That makes me scared, alright / This could be nothing / But I'm willing to give it a try / Please give me something
'Cause someday I might call you from my heart
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