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    The world that revolves is an enormous that cares about our lives

    we the people destroy that hope that can be careless never looking

    ahead on what is going on, even though they have done it there is nothing

    they can do to change it what is done is done our lives is always counting on

    whatever is made by others,


    my choice of example is starting to make a new

    life that inserts from beginning to end which we cannot give up easily in life

    we must keep on trying to keep this world in harmony rather then loosing it

    to just shadows and fear because that is not an option to just give up for,

    the life of others depends on what are your factors that you come up with

    and now it is time for you to show an example that is unforgivable to them by

    making good things again even if they reject you, you must keep on trying to

    tell them that you have changed and made a new life in the world and

    everyone will now how much you care for the life of others and you will keep

    on changing until there is no badness in life because every single person in

    this globe wants to be in such good hands rather then living in fear my only

    option in life is inserting to a new whole person that everyone will admire at

    most through there remains of life that will keep on living. ^_^

    hope everyone likes this one i have inserted all of my efforts into completing it

    Magic intervenes when there is love in first sight.
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    Re: Life Insertion

    oooOOOooo its really really good.Cleverly worded with a strong and important meanig.Great job!!!!!!

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    Re: Life Insertion

    Um... I couldn't even finish reading this. It seemed to wordy, using complex words in perhaps the wrong context is not impressive to me...

    I got the impression that you were trying to make this profound statement about life, and you were trying to do so in an intelligent mannor.

    But I couldn't focus because you used virtually NO punctuation! Not a capital letter or period in sight.... So I couldnt tell where a sentence began or ended...

    Now, I dont mean to be a stickler, but I had to be honest. I still appreciate the effort. And I'd love to read more from you. I wouldn't mind re-reading this one after you've done some editing... So, I hope you consider it.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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