Everything is falling apart nothing you say
will open my heart ,things are to far gone
and my life is another tragic event that
Life and Trust have gave to me.
that line rite there made me think how i have a sucky life thx!
the ideas of the poem were good cuz i think allota people can relate to this stuff, and your ideas were reasonable (i mean not rele stupid or weird) and your vocabulary was nice, and it gave the poem a sophistocated touch. nice !
AAAAAAA, nice work *bored* + =