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Sincere · Jun 21, 2006, 11:34 AM

If you'll all remember a poem written way back by Shade/K' Heart (my love), it was called )Blackness(. He wanted me to read a pain he went through, so I did. And then I decided to mirror his poem to what we mean to each other now. I hope you like it. (This is for you, Justin.)

I awake,
my eyes open,
now they perceive,
perfect light
sadness cannot pierce,
this safe shell,
that warms me.
I can feel now,
it's as if I’m in Heaven
I can fly and smile now
I have someone that cares
friends come and go
and we talk while they’re here
but sometimes they leave
and now I’m ok with that
happiness…
love…
I’m deaf to everyone but you
and blind too.
I only whisper for you
and you hear me
and come running
I cry for happiness now
I cannot even get
the satisfaction,
of brokenness.
no more anger in me
you’ve shown me home
that I never had before
made me feel safe
took away my fears
gone....
being alone was forever ago,
and now I am loved
hope
future
safety
warmth
a best friend
life
dreams.
happiness.
only one past...
and it's fading...
slowly...
fading...
into...
...
the...
...
light...
...
...............
......
......
......
hold.... me............ By Julia Drake (Red Rose)

Shade/K' Heart · Jun 21, 2006, 11:47 AM

Awww... baby, that was too sweet. It's funny. you said mirror and did you ever. Every dot, every line... It was very good.

The Fighter · Jun 21, 2006, 12:14 PM

Another one of your poems that are pact with emotion! haha It was nice.
I thought this set of lines was the High light of your poem, it caught my eye.

Quote:

I only whisper for you
and you hear me
and come running

^_^

*solking* · Jun 21, 2006, 12:16 PM

such talent in the both of you...
i think i got water in my eyes...

Rei_unit00 · Jun 21, 2006, 12:17 PM

I thought you were giving an opinion of your own poem for a second there

least it doesn't sound as depressing as the last poem I read

*Tano-kun* · Jun 21, 2006, 12:52 PM

very nice...it's interesting to see the talents of the AO members...good job

Shinigami_of_Light · Jun 22, 2006, 12:43 AM

This was a good one,I'll have to put up some of mine soon.

Hold.Me.X.Thrill.Me · Jun 22, 2006, 08:32 AM

That is so sweet!!

I like this part:

Quote:

hope
future
safety
warmth

The way you used them words make you think, which i don't usually do..XD

Very effective poem, you can just see the love in it! ^^

Reese · Jun 23, 2006, 07:18 PM

Quote:

sadness cannot pierce,
this safe shell,
that warms me.
I can feel now

Excellent Vocabulary and good use of words. ^_^ Your ability to capture your emotions for that 'special someone' is superb.

All the best Sincere. I look forward to reading more. ^^

jeilee · Jun 23, 2006, 08:15 PM

that one is the sweetest poem i've ever read!
(sorry for that, i'm a sensitive person.... and when i read or watch beautiful poems or movies i cry!)

Jun 21, 2006, 11:34 AM	#1 (permalink)
Sincere Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Justin's heart Posts: 307 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 364	Light If you'll all remember a poem written way back by Shade/K' Heart (my love), it was called )Blackness(. He wanted me to read a pain he went through, so I did. And then I decided to mirror his poem to what we mean to each other now. I hope you like it. (This is for you, Justin.) I awake, my eyes open, now they perceive, perfect light sadness cannot pierce, this safe shell, that warms me. I can feel now, it's as if I’m in Heaven I can fly and smile now I have someone that cares friends come and go and we talk while they’re here but sometimes they leave and now I’m ok with that happiness… love… I’m deaf to everyone but you and blind too. I only whisper for you and you hear me and come running I cry for happiness now I cannot even get the satisfaction, of brokenness. no more anger in me you’ve shown me home that I never had before made me feel safe took away my fears gone.... being alone was forever ago, and now I am loved hope future safety warmth a best friend life dreams. happiness. only one past... and it's fading... slowly... fading... into... ... the... ... light... ... ............... ...... ...... ...... hold.... me............ By Julia Drake (Red Rose) __________________ $C:\Documents and Settings\Julia\My Documents\My Pictures\Siggy.jpg$ A white rose no longer alone I know who's heart it is to represent I didn't pick it, but i let it grow For he's the one that's heaven sent. : I love you, my White Rose.: The Poop Forums
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Shade/K' Heart Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: I am always near... Posts: 409 Thanks: 10 Thanked 4 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 2,889	Re: Light Awww... baby, that was too sweet. It's funny. you said mirror and did you ever. Every dot, every line... It was very good. __________________ Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.
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Rei_unit00 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 143 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 110	Re: Light I thought you were giving an opinion of your own poem for a second there least it doesn't sound as depressing as the last poem I read
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Tano-kun Unmotivated Otaku Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: wouldn't u like to know? Posts: 528 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 110	Re: Light very nice...it's interesting to see the talents of the AO members...good job __________________ Keepin' it real with anime. AO. It's where it's at! Yeah....asian pride.....nothin' but the truth!
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Shinigami_of_Light Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: Dark Tokyo Posts: 207 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 110	Re: Light This was a good one,I'll have to put up some of mine soon. __________________ Omae o Korosu!
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jeilee Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: you have to deal with the grim before finding it Posts: 201 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 436	Re: Light that one is the sweetest poem i've ever read! (sorry for that, i'm a sensitive person.... and when i read or watch beautiful poems or movies i cry!)
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