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    Light And Dark

    Light And Dark

    Dark Is The Darkness
    In A Bright Days Shadow.

    Light Is The Brightness
    On Afull Moon After Dark.

    Dark Is The Blood
    On My Sword
    After A War.

    Light Is A Victory
    For When We Have Won.

    Dark Would Be
    A Black Rose At Night.

    Light Would Be
    The Sun Shinning
    On My Blade.

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    Re: Light And Dark

    Hmm very interesting and as well the description of your life in this poem of dark & light.
    I would like to see more of your work please oh and also you made a great poem that briefly puts this words into a visual picture. Keep it up ^_^

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    Re: Light And Dark

    Wow! how you contrasted the versions of light an dark was great, then ending was great
    "Light Would Be
    The Sun Shinning
    On My Blade."

    It has a dark side to it even though it was ment for the light! you just like me have a little ways to go but great work keep it up, hope to see you around here more!
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    Re: Light And Dark

    Hmmm... interesting indeed... very confusing... It just makes me want to read it again and again, trying to understand what exactly the lyrical "me" is thinking about light and dark... That's good though...

    Ok I understood it untill the last two stranzas, I understood it as- there is light in dark and dark in light. Aaah... and the same might be put into the last stranzas- black rose in the night has it's charm. And light that is shining on a sword is not that good at all.... Did I get it right?
    Nice, nice thought here... Good work, I must almost bow for you.

    Yea... a very good poem indeed ^^ Nice work, I enjoyed reading this and I hope to see more!!!

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    Re: Light And Dark

    Nice poem. I like it. The part
    "Dark Is The Blood
    On My Sword"
    Makes me think of me having a sword and fighting a battle
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    Re: Light And Dark

    Woah... confusing indeed... @.@ Hmm... It's a very interesting read... it kept me on the edge of my seat...

    Hmm i think it has a very deep meaning behind the simple sentences and words you used... it's far complex than what it seems... i am having a hard time to understand...

    I hope you can give us the meaning to the poem..explain to us?

    The structure of this poem is making me envy...how can you make such a simple poem so deep and confusing..

    Nicely done...i'll be on the lookout for your poem from now on... suprise me again and Keep it up ^^

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    Re: Light And Dark

    yes this poem was quite confusing but i like it, especially
    "Dark Would Be
    A Black Rose At Night"
    i also like how you contrasted the light and the dark, very nice
    keep it up!
    ill be looking for more from you. good job!!=)

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    Re: Light And Dark

    Yes as previously said it was a confusing poem as you started off talking about the obvious differences of the two to talk about the war. It almost jumped into talk about blood and way. Maybe if it started talking about your shadow in the darkness of war that would have helped the progression to a great ending.

    It was a good poem and its nice to see a poem that isn't about the emotions but about the physical aspects of life. Although don't be afraid of having variations in the length of the lines in the stanza's sometimes if you get poems that have varied sized stanza's the flow of the poem can be broken but when it comes to words within a line, its not easy to break the flow.

    Overall, it was a great poem to read and it kept me reading till the very end and even read it again in case I missed anything. Great work, I hope to see more from you
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