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    Light Shards

    There's a voice building up within my throat that
    won't seem to take effect when I need it most.

    The pale of my skin doesn't sparkle under the hands
    of the sun anymore, not even the cast of my eyes
    reach the sky.

    The yellows of the world don't spark a flutter in my
    heart like you do.

    Words in books seem to drown under the waves of my
    thoughts, never recovering to the shore.

    Lay with me and look at the world through the distance
    in my eyes, help me compromise.

    I can't stop holding my breath for this place
    to change.

    I can see you in the distance, reaching for my, arms
    outstretched. I'm reaching for you back. hope seems
    always distant.

    As my eye lashes pull back from my lids, I can
    see the world for what it really is.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Light Shards

    it's beautiful, I'm suprised anyone can think so beautifully =)

    p.s.keep em coming

    bii!!
    "act the way you want to be and soon you'll be the way you act"

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    Re: Light Shards

    Quote Originally Posted by fujesal View Post
    it's beautiful, I'm suprised anyone can think so beautifully =)

    p.s.keep em coming

    bii!!
    Aww...thank you. I always thought of my way of thinking more weird than anything. I'm glad you liked it ^-^
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Light Shards

    your way of thinking is beautiful if that poem reflects it!
    and of course I liked it! don't doubt yourself!!!!

    bii!!
    "act the way you want to be and soon you'll be the way you act"

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    Re: Light Shards

    Well, thanks for the advice...I'll try and keep that in mind the next time I am writing ^-^
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Light Shards

    How nice... made me dreamy ^^
    (I really don't suggest people to try and read 4 pages of poems on AO as I do now, too many feelings and emotions at a time...)

    I'm glad to see a nice poem by you again Ofelia!!!! The descriptions in this one are great and I really want to lie down somewhere in the grass and dream about someone special... Nice!!! ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Light Shards

    Thank you ^-^ I was going for a dreamy feeling but wasn't sure if it would get across as much as the sadness does.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Light Shards

    i think its awesome, really amazing. your really good at poetry

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