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    Little Poor Boy

    A little boy in his closet
    Willing to dig his own grave
    Always doing work in his house
    His family turned him into a slave

    Father beated him almost everyday
    Kept on hitting him till he cried
    Mother Threw's him around the house
    Wishing that her son had died

    Big brother pushing him around
    Bullying him at his school
    Little sister calling him names
    This boy's life was never cool.

    Thought of these last night lol. ^_^

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    Re: Little Poor Boy

    Tragic poem.... It was sounding okay to me. I like the rythm of it... but It kind of left me hanging at the end. It seemed like an unfinished story.

    Overall though, I like this piece. keep it up.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Little Poor Boy

    Am good at beginnings but not endings its too sad for me homes lol, thanks for the comment though.

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    Re: Little Poor Boy

    Some sad poem... what would the ending be?
    If i was this guy...I'd dug my grave sooner..but he is patience i guess...

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    Re: Little Poor Boy

    OOOO hurtful Rayme, hurtful, lol nah I just can't think of any endings, thanks for the.....comment.

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