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    Lightbulb Living After the Rain Falls.

    After the rain,
    Where the water gathers.
    Sliding down a crease, where the stem of a leaf rests.
    A leaf which sits high at the top of a tree.
    So high, like his soul. In a tree that towers over me.
    Like his love once did.
    Before the rain.

    After the rain,
    Everything is so clear.
    The dust that chaos has created, has settled on the ground.
    A ground so low... that it seems to be ever sinking.
    This ground is our rock bottom. This dust has made me blind.
    Like his love once did.
    Before the rain.

    Before the rain,
    I saw how the sun peered down on me...
    Until it was swayed over by the leaves of the tree.
    And I hoped for a breath of freash air, while I choked on the dust.
    A warmth that was always stolen. A breath I could only hope for.
    I was lost, until he found me.
    After the rain.

    Before the rain.
    I hated the tree. And, how it stole my sun.
    Before the rain, the dust made me feel so dry.
    But now I see.. The rain turns the dust to mud, with wich to mold new life.
    The tree allows the water to gather, and slowly cascade to the ground.
    I stand beneath the tree, starting a new. I'm living...
    After the rain.

    ***Could it be?! A non rhyming poem, this is something I rarely do... Please tell me if you think its ok.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Living After the Rain Falls.

    great poem i enjoyed reading it cant wait to read more from you

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    Re: Living After the Rain Falls.

    I enjoyed it. Poetry is best told as a story as i say.

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    Re: Living After the Rain Falls.

    Well Nice work ..
    It's that eactly what happened after the rain ...well I like this ...
    Before the rain.
    I hated the tree. And, how it stole my sun.
    Before the rain, the dust made me feel so dry.
    But now I see.. The rain turns the dust to mud, with wich to mold new life.
    The tree allows the water to gather, and slowly cascade to the ground.
    I stand beneath the tree, starting a new. I'm living...
    After the rain.
    This part I love It more ..Great Job..^^

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    Re: Living After the Rain Falls.

    Lol... it is another masterpiece a very well done job ^^ go girl~! be reading more of urs ^^ keep up the good work..

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    Re: Living After the Rain Falls.

    Thank you all so much... It means alot to me, that you all would take the time to read this and comment. As I said, Im insecure about my not rhyming work... Its good to know I am capable of pulling it off. (At least I hope I pulled it off...)
    ... Not Ever Again...

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