The most I'd say you'd need to work on is punctuation and spelling........I know how it is, typing in a hurry. I liked the poem.......it reminds me of how I feel.......Is this how you feel? That you can't seem to express any emotion but anger and hate?That if you let your defenses down, it's just an invitation to the killing blow?
When you let someone see your true heart, does it seem to go badly?
If this is how you feel plenty of times.............Well, no wonder we get along so well!!
Keep up the poetry groove!!