Wow...Sazzy! I can definitely feel the emotion flowing throughout this poem! The only thing I would suggest would be breaking it down into stanzas but then again the format you have it in seems to work well with this style of poem! I absolutely love that way you just let the words that are bouncing around your mind as you wrote this carry the emotion through out the poem. All I can say is that who ever this is I would personally hate to be him right now! Overall well though out poem and nice solid flow. I would expect nothing less from the woman known as Major Saz!