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    loneliness

    lonelinees is the koolest thing in the world
    love is painful, but it feels great to be in love
    death is a joke
    life is worst
    those are my feelings
    that is my weakness
    love is a joke
    nobody loves me anymore
    emo feelings are in my mind roars
    killing myself would be foolish
    i just love being emoish
    don't care what you think
    just let me be what i wanna be.

    This is my first poem, please feel free to say whatever you think about my poem, either bad or good i will take it as a reference to improve my emo poems. Thank you

    Ketaro the death poet.

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    Re: loneliness

    ...............-_-'.....dude wow.....
    good for an emo poem... just dont start cutting...
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    Re: loneliness

    i feel like u being emotionless here with ur saying love is joke n stuff. I hope tht's wut ur trying to convey here. Anyway nice short poem but I feel like it hast ended somehow.

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: loneliness

    u write poems....cool....it's....ok i guess....coz it's more like talking...no offence...im being honest!! lol...but it's ok.

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    Re: loneliness

    hey thanks guys, i write poems when i'm in emo mode.

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    Re: loneliness

    short but 'nuff said... cool... :P nice one, ketaro...

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    Re: loneliness

    Nice poem bro keep it up...

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    Re: loneliness

    Since you said it's your first one, I will go easy on you on my comments. ^_^ Haha. Anyway! I love it, Death poet. Very much so. But, you can definitely try to select different words to make your poem stand out even more, so that's one of my advices to you: Word choice is important to a poem. ^_^

    -Kedar-

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