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    Look At What You Did

    I still remember that night
    I still remember what you did to me
    And left me there. Alone.
    I whear a longed-sleaved shirt
    To hide the bruses and scratches
    But I can still feel the pain
    Now everytime I see you
    Everytime I see your hands
    It remindes me of that night
    I don't tell anyone because I am afraid
    Afraid of what you might do
    Look at what you did to me
    You don't even care
    So yet again I say to you
    Look at what you did

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    Re: Look At What You Did

    A++! nice flow and good use of simple words to convey deep emotion!

    good good!

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    Re: Look At What You Did

    Quote Originally Posted by Abu Dhabi View Post
    A++! nice flow and good use of simple words to convey deep emotion!

    good good!
    Yeah, took your advice and thank you so much! This is my second one and I have some more plz check it out!

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    Re: Look At What You Did

    a poem of hiding things out
    of fear for your safety? very
    cool this poem shows how extream
    some people are and its scary , though
    in some cases those who tend to scare
    become victims there selves.....anyway
    awesome poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Look At What You Did

    yet again another great poem by a great person wow love your poems simply love em



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    Re: Look At What You Did

    *Hope that night did not back*
    a very nice poem ....I like it ....It really good ...

    Foolish beating

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    Re: Look At What You Did

    sad very powerfull words love it absolutely love it ♥da princess(p.s.make sure u keep dis up gurl k?)
    Yeah, Bye.

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