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    Loosing it

    I wrote this the day I snapped. Its an interpretation of what goes on in my head.



    Moving
    Look to the Left
    Water
    Look to the Right
    Trees
    Look Forward
    Death
    Walls of my room closing in
    Sliced by a knife of paper confetti
    I am freed from it
    Take the string
    Strangle her to death
    So what if shes your mom
    She has to die some day
    Look Up
    Hell
    Look Down
    More Hell
    Look Behind
    Destruction
    Words flying off the screen
    Surrounding the necks of the children
    Crush their necks until their heads come off
    Blood to Water
    Water to Wine
    Wine to Sweat
    Sweat to Vomit
    Drop that bomb
    Kill your family
    Walk away a saint
    God himself will learn to fear these hands

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    Re: Loosing it

    Reading this poem shows me that you had a lot of hostility bottled up! Well you found a great way to release it by writing this poem! Keep up the good work!

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    Re: Loosing it

    It really does show how insane your thoughts are sometimes ^_^; No offence buddy, but I enjoyed this poem, keep it up! ^^

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    Re: Loosing it

    hee... I like the words u use. Creepy, yet strong meanings...
    Keep it up!

    Lives link to one another, and the world continues...

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    Re: Loosing it

    you know your one of the few kids that isnt afraid of saying whats in his thoughts or heart and thats what make this poem cool and yea the words or extream but really well because of the situaion your in during writing this.
    and life is at its purest when you hate like this, some say its love but love isnt pure theres to many doors it could open,hate on the other hand has no door because it thrive on truth wich is always given when you hate
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Loosing it

    you have nice words. but i dont really know where you are going with it.
    "... And then, a ray of light pierced the darkness. The light turned into a figure of a person who was followed by a fairy, and also held the spirit of the forest..."



    thats great!! thank you!!


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    Re: Loosing it

    Well its just a depiction of what's inside my head. So it has many thoughts that only some would think but few will say they do. As you can see I'm unwell.

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