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    Unhappy Lost

    All is lost
    you walked a way
    you came, you left
    I guess you couldn't stay
    I am dead without you
    I am alone inside
    My life feels like such a lie
    I am incomplete, can't you see
    Why won't you come back to me
    i'll tell you why
    Because you don't care do you?

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    Re: Lost

    hey wow that poem has alot of meaning 2 it great job
    hope 2 see more

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    Re: Lost

    it was alright a little short for me but thats ok. uhm you need to add more details and the flow was choppy at the end. it seemed like you had a good message but you should work on length and captivating your readers i got bored during the middle. but overall it was good.
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    Re: Lost

    It was really good..
    It's such a terrible feeling...
    To feel lost...
    I know what it means...
    I feel it too even now...
    So keep it up..
    Want to read more..^_^
    We are affraid of losing controle...But why should you be affraid of losing it...While you didnt have it...

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    thanks i will post more soon arh i hate the 50 letter stuff

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    Re: Lost

    Wow that is really good, Short simple and too the point. I like it keep on writing you are really good.

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    Re: Lost

    It sucks when you care about someone that doesn't care for you. But when your lost, sometimes the best thing you can do for yourself, is realize, they aren't going to find you. Or don't want to. Just as your entitled to feel everything in their heart for you, they're entitled to not caring. No one can control their feelings. Only the way they treat people.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Lost

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    It sucks when you care about someone that doesn't care for you. But when your lost, sometimes the best thing you can do for yourself, is realize, they aren't going to find you. Or don't want to. Just as your entitled to feel everything in their heart for you, they're entitled to not caring. No one can control their feelings. Only the way they treat people.
    You know ... you are soo right from now on most of what I post will have been written by me a while a go but I have for the most part moved on

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