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    Smile Lost Bliss

    For those I wish to forget~
    And hate them with love. I know I can't~
    .... We have a history~

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    Lost Bliss
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    Why did it happen,
    why did you let me believe
    Why is it you didn't stop my childish dream
    You came you conquore
    You had your laugh,
    so why do you keep saying you want me back

    I have had enough of your jokes
    and enough of your pride

    I hate being there
    I hate faking now..

    Was this not meant?

    We worked so hard for this,
    and we never stop

    when one know to much,
    one losses touch

    This is what I have done. Not once, but twice
    I feel as if I am fighting with myself
    Just trying so hard not to fight.
    I wished you luck, as I wish for your pain

    You are my reval,

    I have come up a way why we fight.
    With this power I put into making you cry
    and Your none mercyful ways you shown me!
    We love the thrill, and we love the pain
    For what we are. One is in the same.
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    Leave Comment~~ (>.<) Be honest~

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    Re: Lost Bliss

    execpt for a few spelling mistakes which should be sorted out in microsoft word to prevent it, it's pretty good. talking about how lovers are always like breaking up but coming back together. Loving each other, loving how it feels to be with them and so on.

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Lost Bliss

    With this power I put into making you cry
    and Your none mercyful ways you shown me!
    We love the thrill, and we love the pain
    For what we are. One is in the same.


    thats was my favorite part because it shows how
    strong 2 people can be no matter the odds ,wich is what
    i get from this poem as well. very cool poem K cant wait
    to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Lost Bliss

    I really liked your poem. It brought up some emotions for me that I've felt at one time like anger,hurt,and happiness. I look forward to reading more of your work.

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    Re: Lost Bliss

    I wasnt really feeling the flow of the poem. However, I think the format is very creative.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: Lost Bliss

    ... hard to give comment
    some people are like that...the rivals..
    but, not all of them.

    fake?
    .. no idea to comment

    ah.. by the way
    hope you will get better asap.

    okay.. i cannot give more comment.
    i think that's all.
    ganbatte!! (^_^)

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    Re: Lost Bliss

    Nice poem Mr. K, just try to capitalized and punctuate words next time.

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    Re: Lost Bliss

    ... I don't know what to say, all of the good comments are confusing me which will I start to say... It's very good and well expressed...

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