Lost Bliss

*Mr. K* · Oct 15, 2006, 10:11 AM

For those I wish to forget~
And hate them with love. I know I can't~
.... We have a history~
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Lost Bliss
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Why did it happen,
why did you let me believe
Why is it you didn't stop my childish dream
You came you conquore
You had your laugh,
so why do you keep saying you want me back

I have had enough of your jokes
and enough of your pride

I hate being there
I hate faking now..

Was this not meant?

We worked so hard for this,
and we never stop

when one know to much,
one losses touch

This is what I have done. Not once, but twice
I feel as if I am fighting with myself
Just trying so hard not to fight.
I wished you luck, as I wish for your pain

You are my reval,

I have come up a way why we fight.
With this power I put into making you cry
and Your none mercyful ways you shown me!
We love the thrill, and we love the pain
For what we are. One is in the same.
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Leave Comment~~ (>.<) Be honest~

*Blade X* · Oct 15, 2006, 10:15 AM

execpt for a few spelling mistakes which should be sorted out in microsoft word to prevent it, it's pretty good. talking about how lovers are always like breaking up but coming back together. Loving each other, loving how it feels to be with them and so on.

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Oct 15, 2006, 10:36 AM

With this power I put into making you cry
and Your none mercyful ways you shown me!
We love the thrill, and we love the pain
For what we are. One is in the same.

thats was my favorite part because it shows how
strong 2 people can be no matter the odds ,wich is what
i get from this poem as well. very cool poem K cant wait
to read another

*CherryBlossom18* · Oct 15, 2006, 05:31 PM

I really liked your poem. It brought up some emotions for me that I've felt at one time like anger,hurt,and happiness. I look forward to reading more of your work.

*Kasai* · Oct 16, 2006, 02:21 AM

I wasnt really feeling the flow of the poem. However, I think the format is very creative.

baikuza · Oct 16, 2006, 02:31 AM

... hard to give comment
some people are like that...the rivals..
but, not all of them.

fake?
.. no idea to comment

ah.. by the way
hope you will get better asap.

okay.. i cannot give more comment.
i think that's all.
ganbatte!! (^_^)

*ketaro* · Oct 16, 2006, 03:21 AM

Nice poem Mr. K, just try to capitalized and punctuate words next time.

*SousukeSagara* · Oct 16, 2006, 07:37 AM

... I don't know what to say, all of the good comments are confusing me which will I start to say... It's very good and well expressed...

Oct 15, 2006, 10:11 AM	#1 (permalink)
Mr. K THUMBSUCKING ADDICTION Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: (6 Months of Sun) Posts: 1,323 Thanks: 2 Thanked 6 Times in 5 Posts	Lost Bliss For those I wish to forget~ And hate them with love. I know I can't~ .... We have a history~ ----------------------------------- Lost Bliss ----------------------------------- Why did it happen, why did you let me believe Why is it you didn't stop my childish dream You came you conquore You had your laugh, so why do you keep saying you want me back I have had enough of your jokes and enough of your pride I hate being there I hate faking now.. Was this not meant? We worked so hard for this, and we never stop when one know to much, one losses touch This is what I have done. Not once, but twice I feel as if I am fighting with myself Just trying so hard not to fight. I wished you luck, as I wish for your pain You are my reval, I have come up a way why we fight. With this power I put into making you cry and Your none mercyful ways you shown me! We love the thrill, and we love the pain For what we are. One is in the same. ----------------------------------- ----------------------------------- Leave Comment~~ (>.<) Be honest~
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Blade X AO's Demon Slayer Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Protecting my loved one. Posts: 1,606 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Lost Bliss execpt for a few spelling mistakes which should be sorted out in microsoft word to prevent it, it's pretty good. talking about how lovers are always like breaking up but coming back together. Loving each other, loving how it feels to be with them and so on. __________________ Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra
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HolderOfTheDarkChalice King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,957 Thanks: 66 Thanked 58 Times in 54 Posts	Re: Lost Bliss With this power I put into making you cry and Your none mercyful ways you shown me! We love the thrill, and we love the pain For what we are. One is in the same. thats was my favorite part because it shows how strong 2 people can be no matter the odds ,wich is what i get from this poem as well. very cool poem K cant wait to read another __________________
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CherryBlossom18 Heavy Metal Goddess Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: a place where the stars shine as bright as the sun Posts: 578 Thanks: 1 Thanked 16 Times in 16 Posts	Re: Lost Bliss I really liked your poem. It brought up some emotions for me that I've felt at one time like anger,hurt,and happiness. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Lost Bliss I wasnt really feeling the flow of the poem. However, I think the format is very creative. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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Oct 16, 2006, 02:31 AM	#6 (permalink)
baikuza Otaku Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: should i? Posts: 298 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts	Re: Lost Bliss ... hard to give comment some people are like that...the rivals.. but, not all of them. fake? .. no idea to comment ah.. by the way hope you will get better asap. okay.. i cannot give more comment. i think that's all. ganbatte!! (^_^) __________________ .: Gallery :. .: My Live Space :.
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ketaro You's Trollin Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 4,293 Thanks: 30 Thanked 37 Times in 35 Posts	Re: Lost Bliss Nice poem Mr. K, just try to capitalized and punctuate words next time. __________________ O o /¯/___________________________ ________ IM'MA FIRIN' MAH LAZERZ! IBLAAAAAAA! \_\¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯¯ ¯ ¯¯¯¯¯¯¯
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SousukeSagara Mercenary Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: War zones around the globe... Posts: 530 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post	Re: Lost Bliss ... I don't know what to say, all of the good comments are confusing me which will I start to say... It's very good and well expressed... __________________
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