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    Lost in Darkness

    This is quite straight forward, unlike the other one. I forgot where I got the inspiration for it though.

    - Lost in Darkness -

    Sinking...
    Pain...
    Desolate...
    Hopeless...
    Forever...
    In my heart's darkness...

    Until that night...
    Fury...
    Will burn all...

    Lost in the world of dreams...
    Slowly awaiting death's call...

    It's you...
    that told me life's joy...

    It's you...
    that became my pillar of light...

    I smile everyday for you...
    and only you...

    Because only you can forge a future...

    Seven Silk Strands Striking Some Serious Sombrenos.

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    Re: Lost in Darkness

    Its good, but kinda short.

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    Re: Lost in Darkness

    Me likes, but how Rave_Grip put it. Very Short. But very good for a vert short.
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    Cool Re: Lost in Darkness

    Quote Originally Posted by Nausicaä View Post
    This is quite straight forward, unlike the other one. I forgot where I got the inspiration for it though.

    - Lost in Darkness -

    Sinking...
    Pain...
    Desolate...
    Hopeless...
    Forever...
    In my heart's darkness...

    Until that night...
    Fury...
    Will burn all...

    Lost in the world of dreams...
    Slowly awaiting death's call...

    It's you...
    that told me life's joy...

    It's you...
    that became my pillar of light...

    I smile everyday for you...
    and only you...

    Because only you can forge a future...
    yes i must agree it is very good keep up the great work it is very short but if your just starting somewhat out on being abile to do this then i could see why or your not that good with words but you should try and see if you can make your writings longer but it really was very good
    "the past is full of crap from then, the present is full of shit from now and the future is full of nothing at all"

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