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    Lost in the Light of your Eyes

    You and your uncaring glances,
    Shed some light into my ever dyeing world.

    The cold stare you send my way
    warms my heart.
    The cold stare is nothing but,
    An 'I don't know you.' Glance.
    That is fine.

    For your eyes are
    strong and
    beautiful,
    Wistful,
    And Optomistic.

    They give me hope,
    even though you are
    so far from me.

    I am lost.
    Lost in the dark.
    But you give me hope.
    Hope to find another day.
    Hope to lead me to a better way.

    I shall never know
    the strength of those eyes,
    Never the Beauty,
    Nore the wishes that
    lye dormant in your ever warm chest.

    It was not ment to be.
    Never to happen.
    Nore to even be thought of.
    My wishes are futile.
    And go to waste,
    But you still gave me hope
    And now I am on to a better place.

    Living my life and you living yours.
    I can only remember the hours i spent,
    Lost In Your Eyes...
    there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...

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    Re: Lost in the Light of your Eyes

    Great job on the poem. I really liked it. Some of it hit home for me cause most of what you said has happened to me. I look forward to reading more of your work.

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    Re: Lost in the Light of your Eyes

    I'm not a big fan of the way you wrote the poem. Nevertheless, I did see and feel a bit of emotion.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: Lost in the Light of your Eyes

    The random arrangement of the poem was kind of interesting though it didn't catch my view of point. This is a nice one.

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    Re: Lost in the Light of your Eyes

    I also didn't catch it... But maybe I give some hope to somebody...
    Don't worry, and fell for my words... It's a impressive one, I promise...

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