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    lost pain

    the lost pain is back again seeing me with my girlfriend
    i love her so and thats all i know but the pain returns again
    she says she loves me but doesn't write back what am i to do
    when your girl is like that the pain is my heart shattered and bruised
    for the one i love is nowhere yet someone to lose
    my heart does ache and my soul does weep
    for the one i love can now sleep
    i cry inside for life anew i die each time im torn in two i live for earth and die for none along comes a god who will always bring peace and tranquility

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    Quote Originally Posted by awesomeparty12 View Post
    the lost pain is back again seeing me with my girlfriend
    i love her so and thats all i know but the pain returns again
    she says she loves me but doesn't write back what am i to do
    when your girl is like that the pain is my heart shattered and bruised
    for the one i love is nowhere yet someone to lose
    my heart does ache and my soul does weep
    for the one i love can now sleep
    that sucked dude.lol you have know clue how to make a poem it didnt even ryme

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    Re: lost pain

    Forget what i said about that it wasnt what i meant
    Last edited by Genma758; Feb 12, 2009 at 02:46 PM.

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    Re: lost pain

    Quote Originally Posted by Genma758 View Post
    that sucked dude.lol you have know clue how to make a poem it didnt even ryme
    poems don't have to rhyme as long as they are from the heart and please don't disrespect people on this site thank you
    i cry inside for life anew i die each time im torn in two i live for earth and die for none along comes a god who will always bring peace and tranquility

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    Re: lost pain

    Well, I dissagree with Genma758 completely.

    Good poems don't have to rhyme to be good, ya know. I actually liked this poem very much, because it reminded me of a friend's situation that took place not too long ago. I like how you described your feelings, and I can really understand what you're saying.

    Good poem. I can't wait to see more from you. ^^



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    Quote Originally Posted by Akura13 View Post
    Well, I dissagree with Genma758 completely.

    Good poems don't have to rhyme to be good, ya know. I actually liked this poem very much, because it reminded me of a friend's situation that took place not too long ago. I like how you described your feelings, and I can really understand what you're saying.

    Good poem. I can't wait to see more from you. ^^
    thank you so much i just write what my heart tells me to write
    i cry inside for life anew i die each time im torn in two i live for earth and die for none along comes a god who will always bring peace and tranquility

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    Re: lost pain

    Quote Originally Posted by awesomeparty12 View Post
    poems don't have to rhyme as long as they are from the heart and please don't disrespect people on this site thank you
    i agree with awesomeparty12, not all poems rhyme, and people really shouldn't insult others on this site, especially on how or what they write.

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    Re: lost pain

    Quote Originally Posted by DemonicKagomeTahoshi View Post
    i agree with awesomeparty12, not all poems rhyme, and people really shouldn't insult others on this site, especially on how or what they write.
    i agree and i disagree. you dont need to insult but critizing isnt taht almost the same?
    not every body is going to like another's poem or stlye. the whole point of this forum is to help one another become better writers. and sometimes you may not like what you hear and in that case just dont post. -.-
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