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    A lost soul

    You turn,
    you stop,
    you stare,
    you,ve never seen anything like me before,
    those dark eyes stare at you from the shadows.

    Leaves you puzzled,
    you were lost in them,
    I know you were,
    lost in the blankness and torn by pain,
    you see in them.

    I leave you confused don't I?
    you don't know what to think or do,
    whether to keep looking or whether to to run,
    run far from the one that scares you,
    the person that is me the person you can't understand.

    And never will,
    the person whose sick and twisted mind terrrifies you,
    because you don't know what to do,
    make of it,
    what to see from it.

    Whether it will harm you,
    or is it another lost soul,
    just like you?

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    Re: A lost soul

    I like where the poem is going. A bit of revision and some rewording and it could actually be pretty good.
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    Re: A lost soul

    I don't care what that person has to say about it leave it the way it is,it's just lovely the way it is^_^

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