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    Love

    A new thing that’s appeared in my life,
    It’s not the childish feeling that I had before.
    So strong, it’s hard to forget,
    Like riding a bike or driving a car.

    Thinking if my lover’s name,
    Makes me happy and warm.
    Remembering their actions and sayings,
    All brings a smile to my face.

    Laughing at the fond memories in my mind,
    Thinking of the fun we have together.
    Memories that cannot be erased,
    No matter what the future holds.

    Yes, there has be trials,
    But we have passed then.
    Difficulties we have overcome,
    To bring us closer together.

    Love is the feeling I have for you,
    It’s certain no one else is it for.
    Yes love is hard but can do this,
    No matter what it is we will get through.


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    Re: Love

    The last verse is cool. ^^ I love your poem. I love all Love poems. It's how people think about love! I like the way you think love is.

    Love is the feeling I have for you,
    It’s certain no one else is it for.
    Yes love is hard but can do this,
    No matter what it is we will get through.
    I like this, but I like the riding the car, and bike one too. ^^
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    Re: Love

    very interesting....indeed. love is my weakness but i like love poems! ^^....excellent job!

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    Re: Love

    Awesome Dancy. Beautifully written! (^_^) I have read a lot of poems on love, and this is one of the most meaningful ones that I have read. Me, I haven't read any of your poems, so I am glad that you have given us a chance read one of your sparkling pieces of work! ^^; Simply am honored to read it, Dancy. In truth, I am adore this poem of yours on love. It's terrific. No kidding whatsoever.

    But, may I do a few corrections. They are all minor, but I want Dancy's awesome poem to be flawless, though no piece of work is completely flawless. ^_^

    - A new thing that’s appeared in my life: that has or just 'has'.
    - Thinking if my lover’s name: Should be 'of'.
    - Remembering their actions and sayings: his.
    - Yes, there has be trials: have been.
    - But we have passed then: them.
    - Yes love is hard but [missing: we] can do this.

    That's it. It's great, Dancy!!! This poem has already been register into my memories. I mean it. Simply superb, Dancy!!! Please share more, if you have the time.

    -Kedar-

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    Re: Love

    Thank you K
    I like the last verse. it kind of sums what i feel for my boyfriend really. And how my view of Love has changed since i have been with him.

    Thank for you the corrections. Stupid Microsoft works spell cheaker is carp!! hehe. But i will edit it!! *does it now*

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    A new thing has appeared in my life,
    It’s not the childish feeling that I had before.
    So strong, it’s hard to forget,
    Like riding a bike or driving a car.

    Thinking of my lover’s name,
    Makes me happy and warm.
    Remembering his actions and sayings,
    All brings a smile to my face.

    Laughing at the fond memories in my mind,
    Thinking of the fun we have together.
    Memories that cannot be erased,
    No matter what the future holds.

    Yes, there has been trials,
    But we have passed them.
    Difficulties we have overcome,
    To bring us closer together.

    Love is the feeling I have for you,
    It’s certain no one else is it for.
    Yes love is hard but we can do this,
    No matter what it is we will get through.


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    Thank you Kedar
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    Re: Love

    I loved it. Its one of those poems that really make me relive those wonderful moments in my life. Very realistic and descritive... very true, lol.
    Thanks for reminding me of those things I never wanted to forget, lol. ^_^
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    Re: Love

    hmm....honestly...i dun i'll ever relate to luv poems anymore....4 some reasons...it's haunting me o.O but it's a nc work...keep it up..as 4 the grammers...it happens XD

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    Re: Love

    I suck at poetry, so here's my take, haha. I thought the content was good, but the words leave little for the imagination. I don't know what i'm talking about though. I'm just trying to learn here, lol.

    o~Piggy-san~o

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