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    love

    deep in your heart
    you know its wrong
    playing with them
    one at a time
    you ruin their image of love
    you twist it
    turn it
    stab it
    burn it
    smother it
    and let it rot
    changing it forever
    their image of love

    helpful tips appreciated

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    Re: love

    kimi thats really good i can feel the feelings and can relate to that poem i belive its good because it had real feelings great job ^^

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    Re: love

    The word usage in this poem really shows how peoples views of love can be changed by playing with there emotions. But if I may add a suggestion, overall the poem is good a but if you have any personal experiences try linking them into the poem and create a picture in the readers head. I myself can relate to this particular poem since I just wrote one called "Poetic Confessions" check it out and see if you can picture what I'm trying to say. All in all you are on you way to becoming a great writer Kimi!

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    hey! thanks guys >.< but really I dont have experience with it I was just writing this because I saw the way one of my friends were being treated and it just seems so wrong
    you know?

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