This is my 1st time posting my poems pls tell me what i did worng or if it was good


Her smile alone makes me leave to another world.
When the sun shines on her eyes
It looks like a green emerald
When she looks at me I’m lost in her gaze
5 When she left me
My world ended
Her emerald eyes
Turn into coal
Her long brown hair
10 Hide her face form me
When she left me
Her smile is now an evil smirk
The joy of life pored out of my vanes
Sadness seeps into the emptiness of my vains
15 only a single tear ran down my face
Until now I see the dream
I have been living
A dream theat cant come real