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    In Love.

    Ummm... This is actually my first poem to post. it's not as good as everybody's but... well, it's okay. I'm not that good at witting at poems anyways...

    This is actually a version two of my first poem.


    ~~

    In Love.

    My heart is throbbing like hell,
    It's pounding hard.
    What is this?
    This feeling I feel.

    My heart is crying.
    Not because it's sad.
    But happiness?
    What is this?

    You make me feel this way.
    This big throb in my heart.
    How'd you did it?
    What is this?

    Am I in love?
    With the guy I'm with?
    Are you the one who did this to me?
    Am I in love with you?

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    Re: In Love.

    I love the last part I really do
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    it's really good for a first poem! Believe it or not; there is a quick flow in this poem. And synonyms would help too

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    Re: In Love.

    Thankies
    I know. But I was like rushing in making this poem.

    It's gonna be in the school paper and my classmates were telling me to hurry up.

    So, I had no time to think about synonyms.

    Anyways, thanks.

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    Re: In Love.

    Weell welll, a confession of love in the school newspaper? Well, it is worth it then.

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    Re: In Love.

    No, no. It's not a confession.
    It's just a.... umm... A Perspective!

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    Re: In Love.

    So this poem is your perspective of your feelings towrds a guy? That's what it seems...

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    Re: In Love.

    Erm... Maybe?

    Or maybe not.

    I'm not really sure.

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