love to death

love to death


I sit near the pond looking towards the sky

I realize I’m not good enough for you

I know I can’t be what you need

I’m not worth your love

But my love for you bleeds though my heart

Every part of me loves you

But I can’t live to see you with another

I know your turn of me I know you don’t love me the same

So with this clean sharp knife

I stab my heart the one thing that gives me pain and love

I do this for you

Since I know I will never give up loving you

Ill be dead before I see you with another

Now lying in a pool of my own blood

Never to return again

Eeep xP A very sad poem, and there is more darkness than love in it, bu still love the contrast :D

I just love this poem of yours, equinn, it's wonderful, so full of feelings, it almost made me cry... there's enough love and enough darkness in it for me...
I think everything is perfect in this one!!! An exellent work!!! Thank you for this, I enjoyed reading it soooo much!

hehe thanks for the comments i got the love and darkness in it then ^__^

Lizzie you finally learned to use spell check!

=D

I like how it flows without rhyming, but then it seems lik its rhyming.. but isn't.. do you get me? Its good ^^;

This is one of your better ones! I think its lovely..

A poem of contrast is always great to read because it gives the reader a twist in context.This poem use opposing words 'love' and 'death' to create a strong ,emotional text where the reader is able to empathize with the author of the poem and that is good.

Hey Lizzie bizzie, you have improved quite a lot, in my opinion. I don't see any spelling mistakes = +1. The structure of your poem is also decently designed = +1. The meaning is also well conveyed, and it fits fine with the title = +1.. Keep up the good work, and share more of your poems with us.

I know your turn of me I know you don’t love me the same.

Revise that part a little. http://i121.photobucket.com/albums/o...lex/tongue.gif

How sad. That is really a sad poem. But it was very good as well! I really hope to see more!:D: