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    Love Lies

    Every moment , can be said to be alive,
    It has its rainy day's,yet the rainbow alway's
    show's up , only in my heart does the blue
    sky stay's forever because of you.

    The sun it very bright the flower's
    and the warm breeze just take me away'
    i love you forever and a day , you are my heart
    i can't live without you, becuase your my daily bread for love

    The moment is gone you lied to me .flames
    destroy our once peacefull place spot,
    the rainbow now gone the stormy clods now stay,
    how can my heart be so blue and full of sunshine?


    Sun turns to blood as my thought of you go down
    and the warm breez turns into a hurricain ,everything
    i ever gave you turn's todust in my thought's now.oh
    how i hate what you have done to me.

    My love for you there's no word that can descirbe you
    like the pedal's of a rose your so fragile yes so lovey,
    everthing thing we do it's like nothing could go wrong,
    i will always love you,nomatter how it goe's.

    The moon above it share's its romantic light with us
    as we hold eachother other tight it cant be wrong,
    the star's up above there like spot lights on our love
    this night with you, how i wish it could be forever.

    Dawn is here death is now everywhere you're love
    for me desrtoyed it all nothing where ever be the
    same,the moon above turns blood red as i kill
    our love,the stars above are like judges on me,
    as there twinkes fade's from me.

    If only we had never met i would be happy
    like i was , no more lies from you ,it just
    ruins everything i think of you,how i wish
    that you were dead but i know you will one day.

    ok this poem was a bit difficult for me since i never
    tried once like this and never read one like it
    before. but i was going for two points of veiws
    from two people who knew eachother one loved the
    other hated and those are the lies they told so as it makes since
    to anyone who read's it. yea it still has alot opf error's lol
    but this one was sort of hard since i ner done one like this before.
    any comments or sugestions on how to make anotherr like this would be cool
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    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Love Lies

    Wow! This was soooooooooo awesome big bro! I loved it! Such powerful emotions comeing from this poem,awesome! Awesome job big bro
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    Re: Love Lies

    Great poem, you have there Chris. it is filled with description. just be careful with the spelling though. but all in all it is awesome. ^^

    it feels that your poem tells me, love is good and it also destroys as well. love can be a temporary happiness but can end up in an eternal darkness...

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Love Lies

    wow, this poem it's really good, i can feel the hate & love at the same time, it's deep as well, it shows the two sides of love, and i can identify with some parts of it. nice poem (:
    though you should be careful with ur spelling ^-^
    Carpe Diem. Quam minimum credula postero! (:

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    Re: Love Lies

    lol yea i know i will benext time but i was busy trying this difrent way to notice
    the spelling i did go back sevral time but i dont know i still missed alot lol
    but i ammglad you liked it anyway and thank you.
    @ raja you pointed out what this poem is about and i like how you saw that
    not many people would
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Love Lies

    Man the emotions in this poem are awesome! The keep the reader guessing, one minute your pouring your heart out and the next a vengeful hate comes out toward the other person! Outstanding job on this Bro!

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    Re: Love Lies

    Such a wonderfull poem, and yes you did a great job describing different views No need to worry about the errors, it's really good ^_^

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    Re: Love Lies

    wow. that was so emotional!!!! so good. very emotional and nice.

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