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Reply With Quoteuhh...im so sad now. dang*
honestly almost cried. well anyway i like the peom its very good
She was happy with me.
Yet, she ran off with him.
The pain I felt was like
a knife in the shin.
Now she's realized that
she may have made a mistake.
And she knows the first chance I get,
her heart--I will re-take.
Yet, here I am...
Alone and confused.
When she goes home to him,
my heart receives another bruise.
I know she wants to come back!
I can see it in her eyes.
But I'm not sure if she will.
Her man's got too much f*****g pride.
He claims he'll kill a man,
provided that she runs off with him.]
But, I'm not scared of what he says,
I think his words are full of s***.
And if he tries to, let him!
I don't give a god-damn!
If I died in her arms,
I would die a happy man!
Y'see, this is the one
I thought I would marry.
Her new man's my former friend,
that dude isn't scary!
Sometimes I wish that
I could just move on!
But lying to myself, being in
denial is so damn wrong.
What do I do? How should I feel?
I'm such a f*****g wreck!
I feel like a dolphin caught
in a tuna fishing net!
Yet, here I am--again.
Alone and confused.
Maybe this is one battle
that I was destined to lose...
uhh...im so sad now. dang*
honestly almost cried. well anyway i like the peom its very good
Thanx Ky-lyrra
Really? Was it that deep? I didn't know that I'd make people all emotional and what not. I'm glad you liked it though. ^_^ Thanks for your comment.Originally Posted by sisqo
yea no prob. but it might be because im a very emitional person, i cry a lot, like when im tired and i cant go to sleep, i'll cry
Thanx Ky-lyrra
Using cuss words is a bold move.
It has a lot of exclamation marks and half the time it seems like it's being said by a young man, vs. it being typed out as a regular poem.
Makes me think it would sound ggrrreeaatt if it was told on stage.
I really like it, and I don't normally like poetry so that's saying a lot
^__^
Cookie Points~
"You have the face of an Angel"
Wow! Thank you! ^_^ That's kinda what I was goin' for was more of a verbal feel, as opposed to it sounding like somethin' that came out of a printer. I'm glad you liked it, and I appreciate your comments. Thanks again. ^__^ ~S
You're welcome. I'm always glad to point out talent~!
"You have the face of an Angel"
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