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    Love Sick

    She was happy with me.
    Yet, she ran off with him.
    The pain I felt was like
    a knife in the shin.

    Now she's realized that
    she may have made a mistake.
    And she knows the first chance I get,
    her heart--I will re-take.

    Yet, here I am...
    Alone and confused.
    When she goes home to him,
    my heart receives another bruise.

    I know she wants to come back!
    I can see it in her eyes.
    But I'm not sure if she will.
    Her man's got too much f*****g pride.

    He claims he'll kill a man,
    provided that she runs off with him.]
    But, I'm not scared of what he says,
    I think his words are full of s***.

    And if he tries to, let him!
    I don't give a god-damn!
    If I died in her arms,
    I would die a happy man!

    Y'see, this is the one
    I thought I would marry.
    Her new man's my former friend,
    that dude isn't scary!

    Sometimes I wish that
    I could just move on!
    But lying to myself, being in
    denial is so damn wrong.

    What do I do? How should I feel?
    I'm such a f*****g wreck!
    I feel like a dolphin caught
    in a tuna fishing net!

    Yet, here I am--again.
    Alone and confused.
    Maybe this is one battle
    that I was destined to lose...



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    Re: Love Sick

    uhh...im so sad now. dang*
    honestly almost cried. well anyway i like the peom its very good

    Thanx Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Love Sick

    Quote Originally Posted by sisqo View Post
    uhh...im so sad now. dang*
    honestly almost cried. well anyway i like the peom its very good
    Really? Was it that deep? I didn't know that I'd make people all emotional and what not. I'm glad you liked it though. ^_^ Thanks for your comment.


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    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Really? Was it that deep? I didn't know that I'd make people all emotional and what not. I'm glad you liked it though. ^_^ Thanks for your comment.
    yea no prob. but it might be because im a very emitional person, i cry a lot, like when im tired and i cant go to sleep, i'll cry

    Thanx Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Love Sick

    Using cuss words is a bold move.
    It has a lot of exclamation marks and half the time it seems like it's being said by a young man, vs. it being typed out as a regular poem.
    Makes me think it would sound ggrrreeaatt if it was told on stage.
    I really like it, and I don't normally like poetry so that's saying a lot
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    Re: Love Sick

    Quote Originally Posted by Angeling View Post
    Using cuss words is a bold move.
    It has a lot of exclamation marks and half the time it seems like it's being said by a young man, vs. it being typed out as a regular poem.
    Makes me think it would sound ggrrreeaatt if it was told on stage.
    I really like it, and I don't normally like poetry so that's saying a lot
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    Wow! Thank you! ^_^ That's kinda what I was goin' for was more of a verbal feel, as opposed to it sounding like somethin' that came out of a printer. I'm glad you liked it, and I appreciate your comments. Thanks again. ^__^ ~S


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    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Wow! Thank you! ^_^ That's kinda what I was goin' for was more of a verbal feel, as opposed to it sounding like somethin' that came out of a printer. I'm glad you liked it, and I appreciate your comments. Thanks again. ^__^ ~S
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