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    love and wonder

    Sometimes you find yourself thinking,
    What if I were there instead of here?
    But you know that here it is happy,
    And wonder, Will there be just as happy?

    All you know is your happy here.
    Weither or not your happy there,
    You dont venteure because you want happyness.
    But still you feel somthing pulling you.

    That something you cant say what it is,
    But it is strong, and yet you have soemthing else,
    Something making you stay, something stronger.
    but you wanna go to see what it would be like.

    You know if you go, you will hurt someone,
    But you also know if you say you hurt someone.
    Deep down your hurt, on the surface your happy.
    You feel both tugs and they tearing you into two.

    All you want is someone to guid you through,
    Through your confusion, through your doubts,
    Through your fears, and through it all, You have that someone,
    Yet you are lost. You get confused and hide.

    All you can do is wonder and wait,
    But wait for what know one knows.
    For it may take forever, and it may
    Never come, but yet you wait.

    Confusion closing in, darkenss darkening,
    With light fading, you ask yourself,
    Why do things have to be confusing,
    Why are things the way they are?

    Here guys sorry about the length but another randome. tell me what you think about it please and be honest.
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    Cool Re: love and wonder

    <---me

    you--->

    <---still me

    Wowzeez

    It's an awesome poem Ichigo_06,


    My favourite verse...

    You know if you go, you will hurt someone,
    But you also know if you say you hurt someone.
    Deep down your hurt, on the surface your happy.
    You feel both tugs and they tear you into two.
    Ok...you also had a few spelling mistakes <---*me being honest

    It also had a very nice flow, as usual

    And it's like that you're questioning AND answering questions and wondering//// boy am I confused. Love how you wrote it though.



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    Re: love and wonder

    Thanks Zainab and I appreciate your honesty. I will post more soon Promis you that. glad you liked and actually I typed it I didnt write it. lol but thanks again.
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    Re: love and wonder

    it was a good poem. i like it cuz i think that there is a lot of emotion in it.

    Tanks zyta

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    thanks hiei I am glad you liked it (alot of my poems seem to get the emotion side) I will let you know when I post more
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    Re: love and wonder

    very emotional ichigo and so full of detail it like a picture in my head keep it up

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    Thanks Anime I will. I apreciate my work being liked. lol thanks man
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    Re: love and wonder

    lots of feelings you got there bro^^
    seems that you put them in a poem
    and you did a good job
    hope to see more from you

    "If you need something to worship, then worship life - all life, every last crawling bit of it! We're all in this beauty together!" - Frank Herbert

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