love you

Outside is raining
Inside i'm crying
I look at the sky
He is allowed to cry
Why can i do the same?
My mother says:"never cry"
My brother tells me:"always smile"
How can i smile
When my heart is breaking
You told me that
You don't love me
You gest like me
But i still love you
Even if i know that
You'll brake my heart
I have the courage to say:
"I don't care what you do
I still love you".

this is my first poem so tell me what do you think?

i love the poem, it almost put me too tears its so beautiful

That was a really good poem, especially if that's your first arekandera, so keep up your good work ^^

yea argree with alucard there ^^ a very good job for the first poem... :) u might be one of the best here if u train more ^^

tahnks.i wasn't sure if my poem is good and deserves to lose some minutes to read it,i think i have inherit my mothers gift,she wrote wonderful poems

i believe you have inherited your moms gift, you did great for your first one.

Wow... This is good for your first time.. it was better than mine but then again mine was originally supposed to be a song.. lol.. ^_^ I like it and would like to read some more!!!!

awwww^^ you did an excellent job for your first poem^^ im so proud of you *tear tear*:D keep up the good work