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    love you

    Outside is raining
    Inside i'm crying
    I look at the sky
    He is allowed to cry
    Why can i do the same?
    My mother says:"never cry"
    My brother tells me:"always smile"
    How can i smile
    When my heart is breaking
    You told me that
    You don't love me
    You gest like me
    But i still love you
    Even if i know that
    You'll brake my heart
    I have the courage to say:
    "I don't care what you do
    I still love you".

    this is my first poem so tell me what do you think?

    "If you need something to worship, then worship life - all life, every last crawling bit of it! We're all in this beauty together!" - Frank Herbert

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    i love the poem, it almost put me too tears its so beautiful

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    That was a really good poem, especially if that's your first arekandera, so keep up your good work ^^

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    yea argree with alucard there ^^ a very good job for the first poem... u might be one of the best here if u train more ^^

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    tahnks.i wasn't sure if my poem is good and deserves to lose some minutes to read it,i think i have inherit my mothers gift,she wrote wonderful poems

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    i believe you have inherited your moms gift, you did great for your first one.

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    Wow... This is good for your first time.. it was better than mine but then again mine was originally supposed to be a song.. lol.. ^_^ I like it and would like to read some more!!!!

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    awwww^^ you did an excellent job for your first poem^^ im so proud of you *tear tear* keep up the good work
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