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    Loves' (I)'s

    I lost you to another man
    I had lost (I) mind cause I couldn't understand
    I thought I had did the best I can
    I would of walked through hell on (I) knees
    And to the devil I would stand

    I had my whole life blueprinted
    And you was part of the plan
    I guess it is back to the drawing board
    Since you & I are no more

    I loved you cause you was three times the lady plus four
    I loved you cause the personality & charisma you had I adored
    I love you cause you was mine & I was yours

    Now that all of this is no more
    How come (I) heart still feels like it's yours
    When it comes to you & (I) past
    (I) heart keeps opening & shutting doors

    I call it earth feelings cause
    (I) thoughts is the crust
    (I) desires is the mantle
    And (I) love is the inner core

    It runs deep like the ocean
    And I want to be close to you like the shore
    I want you to love (I) on your own accord

    But I can see your love is gone in the wind
    And the breeze is no more...

    I haven't wrote a poem in a minute so, I thought I would write one in the spur of the moment... I have a tendecy to write long poems, so bare with me cause I had to cut this one short for all the viewers/readers... I hope you understand it & enjoy... I'm out!!!

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    Re: Loves' (I)'s

    * Bravo * * Splendid * What a great work this is nice poem...what a great meaning

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    Quote Originally Posted by w1nd1n6s View Post
    * Bravo * * Splendid * What a great work this is nice poem...what a great meaning
    Thanks for the compliment!!! I really 'ppreciate it... I have read your work in fanfics & I am waiting to see what Sora is & who he might end up being with, since he is such a ladies man...

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    Re: Loves' (I)'s

    Very nice Inruto, it perfectly explains how you feel, a very nice work, I really enjoyed reading it... It's written very good and had lots of emotion in it... I liked this:
    "I had my whole life blueprinted
    And you was part of the plan
    I guess it is back to the drawing board
    Since you & I are no more"

    It just made me think of how we plan our life, understand that it's ok to dream and there's nothing wrong in it... And that you can always start anew.. ^^

    Anyways... very nice work, I hope to see more...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Loves' (I)'s

    Hmm... what a unique poem there... hmm... but its a good poem.. and a nice way of an experiment... i must try a new 1... hmm...ideas ideas...where are u~?

    xD would love to read more of urs ^^ keep up the good work..

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    Re: Loves' (I)'s

    very good i like it .very emotional and i love the feelings............can't wait for more
    keep it ↑ ♥~*The Princess*~♥
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    Re: Loves' (I)'s

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    Very nice Inruto, it perfectly explains how you feel, a very nice work, I really enjoyed reading it... It's written very good and had lots of emotion in it... I liked this:
    "I had my whole life blueprinted
    And you was part of the plan
    I guess it is back to the drawing board
    Since you & I are no more"

    It just made me think of how we plan our life, understand that it's ok to dream and there's nothing wrong in it... And that you can always start anew.. ^^
    Anyways... very nice work, I hope to see more...
    Thank you for taking the time to read my work... And you are sooo right it is okay to dream & that you can always start a new one...

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    Hmm... what a unique poem there... hmm... but its a good poem.. and a nice way of an experiment... i must try a new 1... hmm...ideas ideas...where are u~?

    xD would love to read more of urs ^^ keep up the good work..
    I thought that it was kind of a different approach, but I am glad you liked it... I've read some of your work & you seem to capture feelings like a dream catcher net ( when I read your work I can always picture the feelings in reality > I hope this make since) ^_^ ... Anyways thanks for the compliment!!!

    Quote Originally Posted by iluvmyloser View Post
    very good i like it .very emotional and i love the feelings............can't wait for more
    keep it ↑ ♥~*The Princess*~♥
    I do try to put feelings in me writing ^_^ lol... For real though I luv' that you iluv took the time to read my work & wanting me to write more... Hopefully I won't take a long break like I did before...

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    Re: Loves' (I)'s

    wow that was a great poem i enjoyed reading it alot keep it up

    sasuke is mine.

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