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    Lush

    This poem isn't new...but I hope you like it ^-^



    The more I see your face
    the better it gets.

    There are times when I don't know
    which heartbeat is mine and I
    don't care about the time.

    I'm reading over the lines
    you've wrote and remembering your gold, green, and brown.

    The more I hear your voice
    the better it sounds.

    There's a golden tree with
    our names carved into it and
    above it are some stars.

    I want to know just how
    perfect life with you can be,
    will you show me?
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Lush

    I loved it really! It was just great! It was just so romantic really! I hope to see more!
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    Re: Lush

    Nice poem, but shouldn't the title be lust? Unless you're describing what you see when you're drunk, LOL.

    A lush is a super alchoholic. Lust is like love, except more sex less emotion. Just thought I'd point that out. Correct me if I'm wrong, LOL. ^_^


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    Re: Lush

    No...I mean't for it to be lush..because lush also means full of..or overflowing with. I am about to post a new poem if you would like to read it ^-^
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Lush

    omg i love your poem its very emotional and has very powerfull language
    Yeah, Bye.

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    Re: Lush

    A very lovely poem,I really like it, it's very nice and full of love and the last lines makes it just perfect!!!! A wonderful work Kelly!!! ^^

    The only thing that broke it off a lill for me was: "above it are some stars." sounds weird... some stars....

    Anyways, a nice work ^^

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    Re: Lush

    Thankies ^-^...yeah my skill wasn't as advanced as it is now...my skill now isn't really that advanced...I am always improving
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Lush

    Lovely romantic poem absoultly perfect, i hear you skill is better woah thats me sorted wheres your next poem? 4/5 perfectly brilliant

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