Thread: Luv

This is a good poem but it lacked some of the emotions that I like to see in a love poem. Good start though!

Not very romantic are you?
Not bad for a start, but keep practicing. Also, try adding words like adore, if you want.

>< Thank yall ^.^ im ust to doin sad poems and thanks ill take that into mind ^^ i should have one later on this week k till then bye bye

The theme or thought is good, but the words seem somewhat forced and it doesn't flow so well for me. I guess because of the "I love" "I love" starting at the begining of almost every line. It's still pretty good otherwise with the thought you had in mind.

Just keep writing, and I'll keep reading..... Or will I?

Originally Posted by Mattness

This is a good poem but it lacked some of the emotions that I like to see in a love poem. Good start though!

Agreed. This poem was well written, the stanzas were evenly portioned and it rhymed very well, but it was lacking that emotional feeling that is expected from most love poems. It's almost like you were saying the same phrase but with different wording. But it was still a good poem and one hell of a start. Good job! I hope to read more of your work.

i should just stop..... there is no point in trying anymore